Had I the Movements of the Inward Crane

Had I the movements of the inward crane,
That darts in rhythm between the lunar tangle:
My patience would go amiss
For such ascension bound to the solar rays.
And the earthly shores
That utter contempt and fold back the might
Would hear the quiet, sweet inhale
Before they crumble away at the song of the flight.

I will rest myself by the ocean
And know the lulled lapping of water,
That is ever present in my ear;
Comes from the force of two majestic wings spreading breath.
Or the leaves that sway about my feet,
Are the feathers that come blissfully to greet.

Shined energy, vivid, radiant sky
Let your embrace bring forward this light.
For we still stilt as pained as statues
When you are yet to extend your arms
And soar above this stage
Into the ethereal sight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 8/23/2013 4:48:00 PM
Very nice
Login to Reply
Date: 8/23/2013 6:40:00 AM
Yet another truly talented individual; this must be the haven where all the good poets gather. I agree with your other reviewers: well composed and wonderfully expressed sentiments. Thank you for sharing; cool read! :)
Login to Reply
Date: 8/22/2013 11:35:00 AM
A very captivating write and it seems of a beautiful relationship within it's struggles. well done :)
Login to Reply
Asoll Avatar
Aiden Asoll
Date: 8/23/2013 3:54:00 AM
Thankyou! As I say in the previous reply, this poem means a lot to me, so I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 8/21/2013 5:48:00 PM
Aiden, awesome! what an incredible write,the imagery, is so powerful deep nothing yet compares to the inward crane look (UNIQUE) love the way you describe the energy and hope of finding a soaring light. I have to say, I had to read the poem 3 times, somehow I found this poem to be flawless, the emerging, radiant sky, majestic wings, boldness in every line. This poem pins something special, and sad in a way. The last part, breathtaking ... enjoyed~ *LINDA
Login to Reply
Asoll Avatar
Aiden Asoll
Date: 8/22/2013 3:57:00 AM
Hey, Linda thankyou!! This is a poem that means a lot to me, its primarily about someone very close to me really glad you enjoyed it, thankyou
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter