David William Breidenthal Poet Rhyme

Guilt Overflows

Guilt overflows
with a spark of revilement
its decay spreads like fire, 

blinding...conniving...

binding up in its sticky debris
still surviving
tangled whispers bleeding through me
reminders of a depthless past...
listen to the sobs beneath me, 
the hardness of your ears meet my lips at last
deep inside a heap of lies, 
refusing my cries
you can never see how binded I am...
how blinded I am.
you too cannot see...you cannot see
though your eyes meet me, 
still, you cannot see.
the least you can do is listen
listen carefully,
sight is mere illusion, 
follow the voice intently,
it cries softly, oh so softly...
before it dies away unnoticed 
It whispers steadily, 

Remember me, 

Remember me...

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James Inman February 9, 2022 at 5:54 PM So filled with emotion. I like this very much.

Harry Horsman June 8, 2020 at 10:12 AM Hi David, Love the poem, so powerful and emotional.. Always like to visit a poet first posting, and truly surprised you've been on soup, the same length of time i have...

Susan Ashley May 29, 2018 at 1:15 PM JW, the haunting quality of your poem will linger in my mind as an emotionally accessible and relatable piece. Beautifully expressed, powerful and profound, I revel in your multi-layered finesse of meaningful imagery.. A fantastic first post on PS! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Ivor Kos May 21, 2014 at 6:35 PM This is such an awesome job. Great First entry, unlike mine. I'm going to pay due attention to your important contributions. I shall, without a doubt, learn a lot from your first-rate Poems. This one is fascinating. Thumbs up, I must say!

Jake Ponce April 26, 2014 at 11:51 AM I didn't notice you have 5 pages of material! Of course I got curious with your first entry. This is excellent. There's something about older pieces that make them stand out no matter how good/great newer ones are. Perhaps the experience and memories surrounding them make them even more haunting and powerful.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire March 12, 2013 at 8:39 PM Dear David, Hope this finds YOU and YOURS Healthy and High in the Spirit. Welcome to the Worldof POETRYSOUP Congratulations on YOUR POEM "Guilt Overflows" for being a Well deserved Feature. A very descriptive POEM of what guilt is. I am a Big fan of YOUR Sister Laura. When I saw YOUR name on the "Who's on Line" I decided to start reading YOUR Artful POETRY. However I will not read Negativity as YOUR Comment below says. YOU would recieve superb Comments without YOUR Sister help. so Please Hgarvey Daniel Esquire March 12, 2013 at 8:43 PM do not put YOU or YOUR POETRY down. The more YOU Write the better YOU get. Keep the Quill dipped in Ink. With LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry

Laura Breidenthal April 26, 2012 at 1:40 PM yay! I remember this one. Very nice, David. :) Always, Laura

Carol Sunshine Brown August 23, 2011 at 2:36 PM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week David. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 21, 2011 at 11:39 PM Congrats David on your featured poem this week on PS.. wonderful to share luv..

David William Breidenthal July 5, 2010 at 2:34 PM My sister and I wrote this poem a while ago. Without my sister's help, I wouldn't get such comments.(:

David William Breidenthal July 5, 2010 at 2:31 PM Thank you all for the uplifting comments on my poem. I'll paste more of my work and show it off in this website.Maybe later??

Doris Culverhouse July 2, 2010 at 4:20 PM enjoyed

Allison Bowser June 30, 2010 at 3:45 PM I think that everyone can somehow relate to this poem, I loved it !... Allison