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Grown Up Child

There between thoughts sat the child leaning and moving to the beat of moving toward the grow up door Days come and days go and this child speaks out what does it feel like to play with the adult inside walking in circles with worries and reflections does the child protect the circles, open the doors of love to lead a crying spirit~ an adult spirit along the play ground fields to feel the play O' so long ago experienced Does the child sing the song for the adult to dance to the tune to open pleasurable windows to feel to experience from the child of long ago the shadow of adult now standing to the beat of the grow up child~ Pattimari Sheets

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Date: 8/2/2008 11:17:00 AM
Thanks Christy for taking time out to respond.
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Date: 8/2/2008 11:16:00 AM
Thanks Michael Jordan. I'm glad it was clear and you thought it flowed. I appreciate your comment. I just sat down one day when I was frustrated with having an overload and started feeling sorry for myself, and the child came out in me and I wrote the poem.
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Date: 8/2/2008 11:14:00 AM
Thanks for your response Karen O'Leary. The title says it all. I 'm sure I will enjoy my time here, and thanks for the best wishes. Pattimari
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Date: 8/2/2008 11:11:00 AM
Thanks derrick burton, I appreciate your comment. No, there wasn't any problems, just a grown up needing the child and the child trying to help the grown up.
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Date: 8/2/2008 7:28:00 AM
deep poem,but I love to think so wasnt no problem,great poem
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Date: 8/1/2008 6:38:00 PM
Much to think about here. I like the title. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I hope you enjoy your time spent with us. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
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Date: 8/1/2008 3:02:00 PM
Wonderful flow in this poem - the message was clear - great job
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Date: 8/1/2008 12:43:00 PM
Wonderful write, Always, Christy
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Date: 8/1/2008 12:07:00 PM
grown up/child; great!
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