Andrea Dietrich Poet Quintain (English)

Greyhound After Midnight - Contest

(saw a mistake with a rhyme and just now revised this)

I’m on a Greyhound bus – six hours till dawn
It’s late and dark. I think that I must be
the only passenger whose light is on.
I’ll keep that tiny light trained down on me
because I want to write some poetry!

Are people sleeping on this late night ride?
Perhaps, but I will still keep on my light.
There’s little talking; maybe some folks bide
their time while looking out onto the night.
Not I! I take delight in time to write.

Aug 5, 2019 for Janice Canerdy's English Quintain Poetry Contest 
written 8/2/19 after midnight in Iambic Pentameter

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Geoffrey Brewer September 8, 2019 at 2:39 PM The image you have created here is utterly authentic and believable with a poets message at the end. Nice one! Andrea

Connie Marcum Wong September 8, 2019 at 1:17 PM I am back to give you congratulations on your second placement Andrea! xxoo

Janice Canerdy September 7, 2019 at 10:31 PM Andrea, thank you for your GREAT entry. Congratulations on your win. Janice

Connie Marcum Wong August 22, 2019 at 6:37 PM This reminds me of being on the airplane on a night flight. Can never sleep so I read and hope I am not disturbing passengers that want to sleep. Best wishes for a contest win! : ) xxoo

Matthew Anish August 7, 2019 at 8:22 PM Enjoyable write!! I go yo a coffee shop near where I live everyday and write. In September I will be back teaching ESL. Best of health to you and yours! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Rhona Mcferran August 7, 2019 at 2:25 PM Probably the most quiet time you were able to have on the whole bus ride!! Perfectly penned quintain... great work! ;)

Gregory Richard Barden August 7, 2019 at 11:10 AM Very nice write, Andrea - best of luck.

Robert Johnson August 7, 2019 at 10:56 AM Well, this certainly was a convenient contest in it's timing with your midnight ride Andrea. Good luck in Janice's contest. <3

James Horn August 7, 2019 at 7:19 AM Glad that you are home again safe and sound. James Horn August 7, 2019 at 7:22 AM Your back is home again as well as rest of you safely. Do you still work during the summer months?

CayCay Godwin August 6, 2019 at 9:39 PM Your attitude in the poem is delightful and lighthearted. The bus atmosphere came to life for me; the scattered hushed sounds in the dark, the feel of bus wheels consuming road and the lit driver's section where a stranger holds your safety in his hands. People were probably on lit devices unless you heard snoring! Well done iambic. Love, CayCay

Lindsay Laurie August 5, 2019 at 10:34 PM Hello Andrea … I could feel in your verse that sleep wasn't an option, put writing down your thoughts would help you get through the boredom and the night - thank you Andrea - Lindsay Andrea Dietrich August 6, 2019 at 11:26 AM you are so right. I simply cannot sleep anymore unless in my bed or recliner with tv on low and usually having taken a sleeping pill!! the guy across from me on the bus was just sitting there doing nothing the whole time. How boring!!

Tom Cunningham August 5, 2019 at 5:55 PM Lovely verse Andrea, could just picture the scene, you and the driver the only two awake. Hope you had a lovely break meeting your family. Tom

Vijay Pandit August 5, 2019 at 5:36 PM You wrote this on a bus? A talented poetess you are Andrea..all the best. Andrea Dietrich August 5, 2019 at 5:50 PM thanks, Vijay. I wrote five during that time. None of them marvelous, however!