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Gray-Stoned Vineyard

vines grow free
the ruins crashed in nature
gray and green

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Debbie Duncan

January 4, 2013 at 3:53 PM

Love the haiku here. Have a great New Year Laura ;}

Harry Horsman

December 7, 2012 at 3:02 PM

yes i too love the imagery here, one of the best Haiku's i seen for a long time...

Poet Destroyer A

November 20, 2012 at 10:12 PM

Hi Laura, some how i love the image that emerges in your haiku.... i just love nature, gray and all.... always~pd

Duke Beaufort

November 15, 2012 at 7:26 PM

I like it. Reminds me of Ozymandias. So you can be Shelley with grace and simplicity since vineyards are the works of mankind. Wonderful

Sandra Adams

November 14, 2012 at 7:26 PM

awesome image...clearly can see this one...great haiku!

Laila Andresen Mjelde

November 12, 2012 at 2:05 AM

Beautiful, well written very nice Haiku... Hugs - Laila

Terry O'Leary

November 9, 2012 at 3:08 PM

Interesting image... very nice... Terry (& thanks for your kind comments)

Stephen Parker

November 9, 2012 at 8:05 AM

If you want to make it a pure haiku, here is a suggestion. Vines freely sprouting. Archaic buildings crumbling. Grey stones shroud green shoots. Richard is right. This is a scintillating scene captured by your distinguished mind. I love the contrast! Man-made artifacts tumble down, forever gone; while nature recycles treasure from its trove. Enjoyed your verse!

Laura Breidenthal

November 9, 2012 at 1:53 PM

Thanks for the gracious suggestion! I will make a few changes soon. :D ~Laura