Goodbye my love

The time slowly running out.
His body surrendering in one peaceful moment.
And then a final breath.


Wordku: 5-7-5 words

AP: Honorable Mention 2026
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Ashley Avatar
October 14, 2018 at 9:15 PM
Wow! Powerful and poignant emotional imagery, Line. This stirs memories and has quite an impact upon my heart. Brilliant poetry.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Gauthier Avatar
October 15, 2018 at 9:53 AM
Thank you so much for your most appreciated visit and comment, Susan.
Krampe Avatar
October 14, 2018 at 5:02 PM
Good image, Line. Love the word choice "surrender"
Gauthier Avatar
October 14, 2018 at 6:00 PM
Thanks for your most appreciated visit and comment, Agnes.
Kiser Avatar
October 14, 2018 at 12:17 PM
Yes, many exhausting nights when one falls into bed, it does feel like the body is broken. But the sleep is so much deeper. Well done.
Gauthier Avatar
October 14, 2018 at 12:32 PM
Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, ML.
Warrior Avatar
October 14, 2018 at 11:18 AM
Your body ain't broken...you are the great SenryuLine! lol...love & light...^WW^
Gauthier Avatar
October 14, 2018 at 12:00 PM
Thanks for your visit and concern, ^WW^. But it's not always about me. Line xx
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