Good Night Pretoria

The sun kneels to kiss the 
skyscrapers
The Darkness floats above like 
clouds
And those homeless become 
accidental campers
Setting their plastic beds on the 
cold floors

These black concrete rivers
Flood with moving lights
And its banks are swarmed 
With men who’s faces lulled 
Locked in deep thought

As the night ages once more
Laddies emerge from the 
Corners of the streets
Clothed with nothing but 
desperation and despair
As they seek an audience with 
men of matrimony,
They sway their hips fishing 
them to their cause 

Good night Pretoria, the city of 
dreams.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 8/11/2013 12:31:00 AM
My hearty congratulations on your win my dear friend Ronny. Thank you so much as well for sharing your excellent write. Have a grace-filled wkend! Love lots and big hugs, Leonora
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Date: 8/10/2013 3:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your awesome win, homeboy. Well done, my friend. Licia :-)
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Date: 8/9/2013 7:28:00 PM
A nice winning poem....SKAT
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Date: 8/8/2013 9:20:00 PM
Ronny, CONGRATULATIONS!!! With your awesome good poem' in Nathan's contest... Linda
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Date: 8/8/2013 8:16:00 PM
you did well NATE
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Date: 6/18/2012 11:32:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "Metaphoric Time" contest Ronny. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/17/2012 4:22:00 PM
RONNY,;-) congratulations with your wonderful win in my contest~ take care and have yourself a wonderful Fathers Day,~ xox~PD
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Date: 6/1/2012 6:31:00 PM
This is reality which makes this really good. I really like the first two lines; paints a vivid picture <3
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Date: 5/21/2012 12:05:00 PM
Ronny, you captured the nightlife with your images in this write of yours.. Enjoyed ;) Wilma
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Date: 5/11/2012 12:29:00 AM
Glad you enjoyed my poem, Ronny. Night sounds rather hard in Pretoria. Welcome to Poetry Soup. Do hope you enjoy being part of this wonderful group of poets. God bless, Maureen
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Date: 5/4/2012 1:25:00 AM
Lovely!!!!!! so creative you are brother just keep them coming
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Date: 4/30/2012 9:58:00 AM
Ronny, you captivated my attention from the first line...your imagery is super!! Your thought, so deep and touching...it grabs the heart and makes it blead for "Pretoria" and mankind! Thank you for sharing and for stopping by...big hug, love, deb
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Ronny Madonsela
Date: 4/30/2012 1:04:00 PM
it took me quite some time 2 write that line. As poet its important that the first line draws the reader in. Thanx for reading
Date: 4/28/2012 3:45:00 PM
Awesome imagery, Ronny. I especially like the way you describe the "black concrete rivers" because so much of our land has been lost to devlopers. Excellent write! Love, Carolyn
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Ronny Madonsela
Date: 4/30/2012 1:02:00 PM
yes, i wanted to express different views that every1 could relate or understand. Thanx for reading.
Date: 4/27/2012 11:36:00 AM
Ronny Thanks for sharing this poem which introduced me to PRETORIA. It looks like a beautiful city located in South Africa. The society's truth is sad: homeless people abound anywhere. Great poem. Nice meeting you in PS. Dalila Dalila
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Ronny Madonsela
Date: 4/30/2012 1:00:00 PM
it truly is . Thanx for stoping by.
Date: 4/27/2012 12:30:00 AM
i enjpyed this i felt like i was there with you staring out a window watching the world
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Ronny Madonsela
Date: 4/27/2012 12:37:00 AM
thank you.
Date: 4/26/2012 6:15:00 PM
This was so well written and descriptive it was easy to imagine... A very good write... Keep it up Ronny... Love Diana
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Ronny Madonsela
Date: 4/27/2012 12:29:00 AM
thank you diana.
Date: 4/26/2012 2:56:00 PM
Bravo....a poem to be proud of Ronny!!! - oxox Anne-Lise
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Ronny Madonsela
Date: 4/26/2012 3:01:00 PM
thank you i had my doubts at first, bt it came together in the end
Date: 4/26/2012 11:30:00 AM
Wow, this is excellent..I felt as if I was walking along with you in those streets.
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Ronny Madonsela
Date: 4/26/2012 1:43:00 PM
thank you, for joining me in the journey.
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