Good Night Pretoria

The sun kneels to kiss the 
skyscrapers
The Darkness floats above like 
clouds
And those homeless become 
accidental campers
Setting their plastic beds on the 
cold floors

These black concrete rivers
Flood with moving lights
And its banks are swarmed 
With men who’s faces lulled 
Locked in deep thought

As the night ages once more
Laddies emerge from the 
Corners of the streets
Clothed with nothing but 
desperation and despair
As they seek an audience with 
men of matrimony,
They sway their hips fishing 
them to their cause 

Good night Pretoria, the city of 
dreams.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Gasun Avatar
August 11, 2013 at 12:31 AM
My hearty congratulations on your win my dear friend Ronny. Thank you so much as well for sharing your excellent write. Have a grace-filled wkend! Love lots and big hugs, Leonora
Hendricks Avatar
August 10, 2013 at 3:15 AM
Congratulations on your awesome win, homeboy. Well done, my friend. Licia :-)
A  Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 7:28 PM
A nice winning poem....SKAT
A   Avatar
August 8, 2013 at 9:20 PM
Ronny, CONGRATULATIONS!!! With your awesome good poem' in Nathan's contest... Linda
D. Avatar
August 8, 2013 at 8:16 PM
you did well NATE
Brown Avatar
June 18, 2012 at 11:32 AM
Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "Metaphoric Time" contest Ronny. Love, Carol
A   Avatar
June 17, 2012 at 4:22 PM
RONNY,;-) congratulations with your wonderful win in my contest~ take care and have yourself a wonderful Fathers Day,~ xox~PD
Britt Avatar
June 1, 2012 at 6:31 PM
This is reality which makes this really good. I really like the first two lines; paints a vivid picture <3
Neels Avatar
May 21, 2012 at 12:05 PM
Ronny, you captured the nightlife with your images in this write of yours.. Enjoyed ;) Wilma
Lefanue Avatar
May 11, 2012 at 12:29 AM
Glad you enjoyed my poem, Ronny. Night sounds rather hard in Pretoria. Welcome to Poetry Soup. Do hope you enjoy being part of this wonderful group of poets. God bless, Maureen
Ditshwele Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 1:25 AM
Lovely!!!!!! so creative you are brother just keep them coming
Burch Avatar
April 30, 2012 at 9:58 AM
Ronny, you captivated my attention from the first line...your imagery is super!! Your thought, so deep and touching...it grabs the heart and makes it blead for "Pretoria" and mankind! Thank you for sharing and for stopping by...big hug, love, deb
Madonsela Avatar
April 30, 2012 at 1:04 PM
it took me quite some time 2 write that line. As poet its important that the first line draws the reader in. Thanx for reading
Devonshire Avatar
April 28, 2012 at 3:45 PM
Awesome imagery, Ronny. I especially like the way you describe the "black concrete rivers" because so much of our land has been lost to devlopers. Excellent write! Love, Carolyn
Madonsela Avatar
April 30, 2012 at 1:02 PM
yes, i wanted to express different views that every1 could relate or understand. Thanx for reading.
Agtani Avatar
April 27, 2012 at 11:36 AM
Ronny Thanks for sharing this poem which introduced me to PRETORIA. It looks like a beautiful city located in South Africa. The society's truth is sad: homeless people abound anywhere. Great poem. Nice meeting you in PS. Dalila Dalila
Madonsela Avatar
April 30, 2012 at 1:00 PM
it truly is . Thanx for stoping by.
Rossman Avatar
April 27, 2012 at 12:30 AM
i enjpyed this i felt like i was there with you staring out a window watching the world
Madonsela Avatar
April 27, 2012 at 12:37 AM
thank you.
Mohammed Avatar
April 26, 2012 at 6:15 PM
This was so well written and descriptive it was easy to imagine... A very good write... Keep it up Ronny... Love Diana
Madonsela Avatar
April 27, 2012 at 12:29 AM
thank you diana.
Andresen Avatar
April 26, 2012 at 2:56 PM
Bravo....a poem to be proud of Ronny!!! - oxox Anne-Lise
Madonsela Avatar
April 26, 2012 at 3:01 PM
thank you i had my doubts at first, bt it came together in the end
Ink-U-Script Avatar
April 26, 2012 at 11:30 AM
Wow, this is excellent..I felt as if I was walking along with you in those streets.
Madonsela Avatar
April 26, 2012 at 1:43 PM
thank you, for joining me in the journey.
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