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Gone

Overcome by your...
shivering cold rancid breath
Death lies beside me


3rd Place Winner
Brian Strand's Contest # 183
June 2012

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Funom Makama

September 23, 2014 at 11:58 AM

Excellent poetry. Just exactly what I needed this hot evening. Thanks for the share

Kelly Elizabeth

May 9, 2014 at 6:27 AM

Very deep.

Poet Destroyer A

January 11, 2013 at 9:40 PM

wow.... a deep one here.....xox~LINDA

Harry Horsman

November 21, 2012 at 7:52 AM

wow this is powerful Carol...

Omojevwe Emmanuel Brown

July 15, 2012 at 6:19 PM

Very good keep it up caro.

Sherese Gooden

July 14, 2012 at 1:42 PM

Carol I'm loving the form. You are really working it.

David Scott

July 13, 2012 at 9:44 AM

SHORT AND SWEET NICE PIECE WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN NOT HEARD FROM YOU FOR A WHILE X DAVID SCOTT

Seth C Mongrut

July 13, 2012 at 8:07 AM

Short and sweet! Loved it! :)

Elijah Prophet

July 11, 2012 at 2:54 PM

dear carol i appreciate all your comments and find your writing outstanding. yet i just write what i feel and don't feel polish with grammar and other matters dealing with the critque's of writing. God bless You with energy and strength to continue your inspirational acalades of poetrysoup writers.

Andrea Dietrich

July 3, 2012 at 8:46 PM

Awesome, I say you got a placement from Brian with this one. Congrats, Carol.

Sherese Gooden

July 3, 2012 at 3:29 PM

Thank you Carol. You are indeed a talented poet.

Ravi Sathasivam

June 26, 2012 at 10:40 PM

Wonderful write. Well said. tfs

Andrea Dietrich

June 26, 2012 at 7:28 PM

Carol you don't have to say sorry about anything. You can only do your best here. I sometimes cannot come here and I get so behind, but that is life! STay well. Luv, Andrea

Phyllis Babcock

June 26, 2012 at 10:37 AM

Thanks for your comment and yes like you I have been super busy and so behind on the soup. the traveling to babysit 3 days a week and then 2 days at the shop for my other son has this mom going full tilt. Hugs an congrats I see you won the contest. awesome. love phyl

Susan Palli

June 25, 2012 at 2:06 PM

wow, can feel the dread

Wilma Neels

June 22, 2012 at 12:00 PM

Hey Carol, hope you had an awesome week, enjoy the weekend ahead.. Love Wilma

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

June 21, 2012 at 7:57 AM

Wow! Congratulations, indeed! that is awesome.

Jancarl Campi

June 21, 2012 at 4:57 AM

I love this poem. In just three lines you said so much. I read it and actually shook. Congrads on your win. And thanks for reading my new orleans poem. Take care, Jancarl