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Going Down Under

Going Down Under! Toes step, from dry to wet sand Foot sinks, bathes in waves Whoosh, waves splash ankles to toes Cold, cool water, how far should I go? Waves pulls back, pulls sand into sea Feet step, from wet to wetter sand Feet sink, deeper in still Cold, cool water, how far should I go? Whoosh, waves splash ankles to knees Waves deciding, I’m getting wetter Whoosh, waves splash, knees to belly Knees jelly, with my jelly belly Whoosh, waves crash, belly to chest Waves deciding, I’m falling backwards Whoosh, waves smash, above me, Falling, crawling, Going Down Under! Noels_Art Comments: Sometimes the water’s cold. FEEDBACK WELCOME.

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Date: 4/20/2019 4:25:00 PM
I can see the words in thought...nice.
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Date: 4/21/2019 10:50:00 AM
Thanks J Hamilton, I'll follow you, take a look at your good stuff. Noel from NoelsArt
Date: 3/7/2019 5:52:00 PM
Excellent Noel. Undertow can sweep a person out to sea before they are aware. : )
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Date: 3/19/2019 6:09:00 PM
Connie, thanks for your feedback. Let's stay aware and not get swept away! Noel from NoelsArt
Date: 2/28/2019 7:25:00 PM
this is REALLY good, Noel. I just gave a fave to someone's romantic poem but for originality, this is my second Fave of the evening. That is me feedback!!
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Date: 3/1/2019 5:06:00 AM
Andrea, keep fav-ing, you make people happy. NoelsArt
Date: 2/23/2019 7:52:00 PM
Noel! Well done... I have not been in sand and water for quite a while. You had me reliving the pleasure. Great fun Thank you Panagiota
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Date: 2/24/2019 6:27:00 AM
Panagiota, I'm happy to take you back to where you might be going again! NoelsArt
Date: 2/22/2019 5:50:00 AM
I like the quick snappiness of this one, it made it easy to read, and fun. I felt like I was the one going under.
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Date: 2/22/2019 6:44:00 AM
Thanks Caren, I had difficulty with last stanza, write, rewrite,write, rewrite... Sometimes you just have to end it.