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Going Down Under

Going Down Under!

Toes step, from dry to wet sand 
Foot sinks, bathes in waves 
Whoosh, waves splash ankles to toes
Cold, cool water, how far should I go?

Waves pulls back, pulls sand into sea
Feet step, from wet to wetter sand
Feet sink, deeper in still
Cold, cool water, how far should I go?

Whoosh, waves splash ankles to knees
Waves deciding, I’m getting wetter
Whoosh, waves splash, knees to belly
Knees jelly, with my jelly belly

Whoosh, waves crash, belly to chest
Waves deciding, I’m falling backwards
Whoosh, waves smash, above me,
Falling, crawling, Going Down Under!

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J Hamilton Gist

Date: 4/20/2019 4:25:00 PM

I can see the words in thought...nice.

Noel Flater
Date: 4/21/2019 10:50:00 AM

Thanks J Hamilton, I'll follow you, take a look at your good stuff. Noel from NoelsArt

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/7/2019 5:52:00 PM

Excellent Noel. Undertow can sweep a person out to sea before they are aware. : )

Noel Flater
Date: 3/19/2019 6:09:00 PM

Connie, thanks for your feedback. Let's stay aware and not get swept away! Noel from NoelsArt

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/28/2019 7:25:00 PM

this is REALLY good, Noel. I just gave a fave to someone's romantic poem but for originality, this is my second Fave of the evening. That is me feedback!!

Noel Flater
Date: 3/1/2019 5:06:00 AM

Andrea, keep fav-ing, you make people happy. NoelsArt