Godspeed

final autumn leaf clings to skeletal branch life in the balance 12th November 2014

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Robert Warlov

Date: 9/6/2023 12:49:00 PM

Perfect rendition. A vicarious herald.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/7/2023 8:12:00 AM

Thanks so much for you editing suggestions, I had never heard of haiku before I joined soup and this is an early attempt. I will now use your idea, thank you so much!!:-) hugs Jan xx

Darlene Gifford

Date: 11/21/2014 7:39:00 AM

Love and Prayers for your Dad, Jan. A very fitting poem. Blessings, Darlene

Jan Allison
Date: 11/21/2014 9:05:00 AM

Thanks so much Darlene I've just come back from visiting him in hospice - he's doing really well bless him:-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 11/17/2014 4:14:00 PM

The years roll on like a sinister glissando. This poem is bittersweet and lovely . Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2014 4:17:00 PM

Thanks Matthew it is inspired by my dad who has terminal cancer:-( Hugs jan xx

John Beam

Date: 11/13/2014 8:25:00 AM

I enjoyed reading some of your poetry and thanks for comment on my grook. I really like the imagery in this one.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/13/2014 8:34:00 AM

Thanks John I do appreciate you dropping by and commenting:-) Hugs Jan xx

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 11/12/2014 5:04:00 PM

deep very beautifully crafted piece jan

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2014 5:05:00 PM

Thanks so much Liam:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/12/2014 3:49:00 PM

I agree with Paul. Very heartfelt and touching. It has too many syllables for both modern and traditional haiku but it would make an excellent itty bitty free verse poem.

Robert Warlov
Date: 9/6/2023 1:30:00 PM

But it's there. EDIT: 'Final autumn leaf' ~ 'clings to the skeletal branch' ~ 'Life in the balance'.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2014 4:16:00 PM

Thanks Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx