Godspeed

final autumn leaf 
clings to skeletal branch 
life in the balance 

12th November 2014

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Robert Warlov

September 6, 2023 at 12:49 PM

Perfect rendition. A vicarious herald.

Jan Allison

September 7, 2023 at 8:12 AM

Thanks so much for you editing suggestions, I had never heard of haiku before I joined soup and this is an early attempt. I will now use your idea, thank you so much!!:-) hugs Jan xx

Darlene Gifford

November 21, 2014 at 7:39 AM

Love and Prayers for your Dad, Jan. A very fitting poem. Blessings, Darlene

Jan Allison

November 21, 2014 at 9:05 AM

Thanks so much Darlene I've just come back from visiting him in hospice - he's doing really well bless him:-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish

November 17, 2014 at 4:14 PM

The years roll on like a sinister glissando. This poem is bittersweet and lovely . Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison

November 17, 2014 at 4:17 PM

Thanks Matthew it is inspired by my dad who has terminal cancer:-( Hugs jan xx

John Beam

November 13, 2014 at 8:25 AM

I enjoyed reading some of your poetry and thanks for comment on my grook. I really like the imagery in this one.

Jan Allison

November 13, 2014 at 8:34 AM

Thanks John I do appreciate you dropping by and commenting:-) Hugs Jan xx

Liam Mcdaid

November 12, 2014 at 5:04 PM

deep very beautifully crafted piece jan

Jan Allison

November 12, 2014 at 5:05 PM

Thanks so much Liam:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

November 12, 2014 at 3:49 PM

I agree with Paul. Very heartfelt and touching. It has too many syllables for both modern and traditional haiku but it would make an excellent itty bitty free verse poem.

Robert Warlov

September 6, 2023 at 1:30 PM

But it's there. EDIT: 'Final autumn leaf' ~ 'clings to the skeletal branch' ~ 'Life in the balance'.

Jan Allison

November 12, 2014 at 4:16 PM

Thanks Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx