Gift Exchange To Brian From Mandy

To Brian From Mandy
My gift I give to you is more of a character inspection
I give you permission to leave your ongoing introspection

Stop worrying your artistic self with form and stanza true
Let yourself, really go and lets find the real you.

You are educated and artistic but that’s what your blogs say
Just express you yourself, and not quote other poets for just one day.

My gift is given in love, I would like to hear the real you
Not the man behind the educated artistic, and the formal poet too.

Please take my gift as it is given in love, and let yourself really go
I can’t wait to see the real you when your artistic juices flow.

You study form and stick to it but the more that you try
To get it right, which you do, I feel the real you pass on by.

For your excellent poetry and your artistic talent too,
I know you will give thanks to God, for giving them to you
.
Use them once for you, be selfish, don’t worry about form one day.
And lets the words flow from you, and not what other poets say.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Horsman Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 9:39 PM
Reading my favourite poems here on soup,,,i have a feeling you'll be coming up many time..
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January 16, 2013 at 7:27 AM
re reading this, wow a lot as changed in a year, amazingly.. i like this, if this did offend, which i'll be surprised if so.. but i do feel there is still heaps of sobbery in poetry, you must tell me more about this poem of yours....
Esquire Avatar
December 14, 2012 at 9:48 AM
Dear Mandy, I see YOU know Brian quite well, I once sent him a Soup mail telling him why I never entered any of his contest to sophisticated for me, not being a real POET. I very seldom follow forms as I don't even really know what Iambic Pentameter means. Congratulations on YOUR well deserved Win in P.D.'s contest LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal (Young) Liege. ..Harry
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December 10, 2012 at 7:33 AM
wow, Mandy this brilliant, i agree entirely with you, on this subject, i wrote once a sonnet for Debbie, about exactly what you are talking about here..awesome poem just love this.. to my fav
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 10, 2012 at 10:42 AM
Ha he never forgave me lol xx
Arno Avatar
January 5, 2012 at 4:24 PM
Congratulations on your beautiful write Best regards, Jon
Brown Avatar
January 5, 2012 at 5:52 AM
Congrats on your win in the "Gift Exchange" contest Mandy. Love, Carol
Poet Avatar
January 2, 2012 at 8:53 AM
Congratulations Mandy on your win.Nice tribute to Brian.
Lane Avatar
January 2, 2012 at 8:09 AM
Congratulations on your impressive win.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
January 2, 2012 at 8:14 AM
Cheers Tony x
Neels Avatar
January 2, 2012 at 3:28 AM
Congratulations on your win Mandy x
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
January 2, 2012 at 8:15 AM
Thanks Wilma x
Williams Avatar
January 2, 2012 at 2:19 AM
Mandy congrats on your win, Happy New Year..David
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
January 2, 2012 at 2:33 AM
Thanks David and the same to you and yours x
Devnath  Avatar
January 1, 2012 at 10:33 PM
Congratulation for getting 3rd place in the contest in this Happy new year. Loved it and enjoyed your poem and your win. bl
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
January 2, 2012 at 2:34 AM
Thanks BL and the smae to you my friend x
Johnson Avatar
January 1, 2012 at 8:37 PM
Great telling poetry, to open doors , good try, well done here babe ...bye by
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
January 1, 2012 at 8:45 PM
Thanks Don x
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January 1, 2012 at 7:10 PM
MANDY, happy new year.. and CONGRATULATIONS ;-) on my gift exchange contest. Thank you for being part of the joy of giving another poet a poem from the bottom of your heart,, the best wishes to you and your family this 2012 year,..always p.d.
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December 23, 2011 at 3:15 AM
Thank you Mandy for comments,forever expressed in verse(not the first one to so do,so I am used to that and am in good company)To address your points. 1.I have posted some 3500 poems here on PS Since May 2007 and they have covered all styles/forms/emotions and bio info. 2.Being an artform verse cannot be'free',in the sense of having no limitations or guiding principles.(WCW)He is right,thats the way it is,otherwis,it is not poetry.My criteria is it poetical. Best wishes with your writing.Brian
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 23, 2011 at 3:29 AM
You are a top man Brian. I wish I had some education, it would be nice to fall back on. Wishing you and yours all the best. x
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December 21, 2011 at 6:38 PM
wow. you are very brave to put this out there. i hope he won't be offended by this. i think it's good words of advice for everyone, especially the sticklers, strictys, and rules rules people. there are so many good poems out there that don't follow form or speak of angry (or other) emotions, that are missed when people close their minds!
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December 22, 2011 at 1:08 AM
I will remove it if i find it caused offence it's not meant too. I only want him to throw himself into his work, he is an eduacted artistic man and I think he is missing an oppotunity to be the ral man insde the educated shell. I may be totally wrong and that is him and who's to say there is anything wrong with that. My gift is permission to let rip. x
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December 21, 2011 at 4:55 PM
I guess everyone writes in the style to which they are accustomed. I sometimes wish to see him let loose in the blogs!! It's fun to see the "real you" come out in those things. This was a fun read, Mandy.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 22, 2011 at 1:05 AM
I certainly don't mean to offend as I say he is excellent. Me being uneducated find quotes boring and think they hide somthing more.x
Brown Avatar
December 21, 2011 at 8:00 AM
The best to you in the contest Mandy. Love, Carol
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 21, 2011 at 8:09 AM
Thanks Carol and the same to you always x
Cooper Avatar
December 21, 2011 at 7:51 AM
lucky Brian being the brunt of your talent lovely write here mandy
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 21, 2011 at 7:59 AM
Thank you for taking the time to read ,and comment x
Lane Avatar
December 21, 2011 at 4:55 AM
Wait, are you going to write one asking me to talk less about myself?
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 21, 2011 at 5:03 AM
Not at all I think I may know the real you and don't change. I think you already let your juices flow x
Williams Avatar
December 21, 2011 at 4:31 AM
Mandy rock on..David
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December 21, 2011 at 4:42 AM
Thanks David i was just reading on eof yours when your meaasge came in. I will get back to it now.x
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