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Written: December 12, 2023, For Shadow Hamilton Contest _______________________________________ People can only thrive on this wealth scale With undying faith, we admire our flag Sullen calm and dearth of prowess prevail. Just few people groove stanch affluence gale whilst most all strive tough with null in the bag People can only thrive on this wealth scale. We are rivaled with a stern choice trial A person's rank is viewed by his wealth tag Sullen calm and dearth of prowess prevail. Trading rule exceeds all neat deals for sale Where smash checkers are, indeed, rulers slag People can only thrive on this wealth scale. There is a fictive guise dubbed classless tale Though, our right of recourse has little brag Sullen calm and dearth of prowess prevail. With their bogus pledge to clear off our lag A plush caste is riding blindly as swag People can only thrive on this wealth scale Sullen calm and dearth of prowess prevail.

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Silent One

Date: 1/15/2024 2:16:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 1/12/2024 9:25:00 AM

well done on placing Sotto Hugs Shadow

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/14/2023 5:40:00 AM

Dear Sotto, this is such an impeccable take for the contest, conveying the depth of s very deep and delicate topic. You've expressed everything in such a profound way in this villanelle poem whilst giving the meaningful essence. I am truly amazed by your artistic prowess how you are able to deliver the insight of all this, in a poetic way.Sadly, wealth has overpower morals and values and you've truly depicted this in an impactful way. "We are rivaled with a stern choice trial"Absolutely powerful

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/14/2023 5:40:00 AM

Best of luck to you for the contest!!

Ink Empress

Date: 12/13/2023 2:44:00 AM

What a profound and meaningful write this is dr sotto. Sadly this is true and you see past all that and convey them through poetry in such an eloquent manner. Seems like rhymes come easy for you. You do them always in a unique way. I especially love “‘We are rivaled with a stern choice trial A person's rank is viewed by his wealth tag Sullen calm and dearth of prowess prevail.” Well said so powerful! Absolutely love this poem so well crafted. With such soul hitting truths. Best wishes always

Anisha Dutta

Date: 12/13/2023 12:56:00 AM

A person’s rank is viewed by his wealth tag ……….Sullen calm and dearth of prowess prevail….. So nicely composed. I admire

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/12/2023 4:23:00 PM

wow, Sotto! What a riveting poem seems to tell the tale of the power, rich elite versus those who with undying faith admire our flag (our country) The power elite with their 'fictive guise' were such compelling words. I love the references to 'caste' and the 'invisible caste system' in American. The rich can only thrive on the wealth scale while others thrive on sullenness and scarcity. Hopefully, I'm getting at the meaning of your well constructed poem. Have a great evening, Sara

Speaks Volumes

Date: 12/12/2023 1:23:00 PM

Love the poem Las. Your command of linguistics is remarkable. Every best wish Wen.