Njeri Hunjeri Poet Rhyme

Get Low Low

I got pushed further down
Into the heart of the black hole
My heart torn to the unknown 
My mind became a blanket of coal

My tears covered me whole
Drenched in pain, living tamed
Alcohol gave me the soul and the goal
The only friend that gave me a taste of the wild

Borderline to the normal 
Fenced to the abnormal 
Labelled for mental instability 
Even family evaded, no more usability 

My sunken face, my unappealing fashion
My mind with its many characters, always ready for action
My dear friend the drink, who daily I held
Higher I got with it, then lower I got to the cold


Casarah Nance contest
July 21 2015

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Richard Lamoureux July 30, 2015 at 8:27 AM You brought us into different realm. I suspect when you are this low you can only start to go up from there. Njeri Hunjeri September 15, 2015 at 11:10 AM Very encouraging. I like "....low you can only start to go up from there." Thank u Richard

Kp Nunez July 22, 2015 at 9:49 AM Powerful write Njeri. The last line caps it perfectly. Feels like a documentary of someone's life. I hope to see this in the winning list! hugs! Njeri Hunjeri July 23, 2015 at 9:49 AM Yes its a life of someone close to me who has mental illness and also deals with alcoholism. Thank u Kim

Jerry T Curtis July 21, 2015 at 6:35 PM Njeri, If Low is worth the Highest honor, you have earned it, with your soul. Most people in my country have not traveled abroad or if they have, not outside the tourist zones. No matter how Low we think we have it in the US, there are many places in this world where it's Low Low. Take care my friend. a 7 and a winner Njeri Hunjeri July 23, 2015 at 9:52 AM Thats very true. There are people in the world who deal with poverty and hardships that no human or living being should go through. Thank u Jerry

Len Gasun July 21, 2015 at 10:17 AM This is a wonderful write my dear fried, njeri. I'm sure it will do well in the contest. Thanks a lot for sharing! love lots and big hug, Leonora Njeri Hunjeri July 23, 2015 at 9:53 AM Thank you Leonora, i appreciate the visit.