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Frozen Heart

I will move away from his winter bleached white heart Redemption draws nigh The place I met him no longer its warmth entice Serve me a red heart Thoughts of him gone cold as red scorn bled love vein dry Green pastures I see

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Honestly J.T.

Date: 1/26/2013 6:16:00 AM

Wow, if precious moments in time were only frozen so we could experience them longer. Good write - JH

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/22/2013 3:17:00 AM

Dear Joy,Happiness will be impossible to stay away From you! Beautiful! I enjoyed it.Thank you!

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 1/10/2013 11:46:00 AM

Joy; I love this poem. It has a lot of feeling. For years I felt like that - like I had a frozen heart. God took care of that. Something else happened and now I just feel lonely. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 1/7/2013 3:56:00 AM

I love this one too, deep poem, great penned joy, I did enjoyed them so much :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/22/2012 4:45:00 PM

Hello Joy, stopping by to read this one again,, and wish you a happy thanksgiving,,, always~pd

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/20/2012 7:01:00 AM

Where have you gone 'little one' one whole month almost with no writes do not neglect your skill! Light & Love

Jack Horne

Date: 11/4/2012 1:13:00 PM

lovely haiku, Joy

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 11/3/2012 11:12:00 AM

Great poem, I like it. Yes you need some green pastures and new horizions to explore. Smile we love you. Lucilla

Len Gasun

Date: 10/30/2012 8:20:00 AM

A splendid poem you've penned my dear friend, Joy! I love it! Thank you so much for stopping by and your wonderful comments on my work! hugs, LG

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/30/2012 8:05:00 AM

I always enjoy seeing a poem of yours, Joy. and I know this is one straight from your lovely heart. wishing those green pastures for you!

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 10/29/2012 9:38:00 PM

Nice poem. I can relate to it. I've had a frozen heart for some time. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 10/28/2012 7:40:00 AM

Wonderful piece my dear Joy... hugs Michael

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/25/2012 12:04:00 PM

Joy if 5 people write for your contest in 1 poem do all five have to mention giving presents to each other in each of the 5 verses of 8 lines or less? This will be very confusing to rank? DO all 5 enter the same poem to you? HELP

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/25/2012 7:36:00 AM

Joy it's a thrill for me for you to ask for help, I enjoy helping almost as much as writing. I have done a number of blogs on haiku and folks I believe are sick of hearing me talk about haiku BUT I will talk to you here. [soup mail is an extra step, time's limited] YES the FRAGMENTED LINE which can be line 1 or line 3 [for now let's stay with those 2] HAS TO relate to the other two lines but NOT BE cause & effect.

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 10/25/2012 7:42:00 AM

Think of taking a SNAP SHOT to write a simple beginners haiku you DESCRIBE what's IN the shot. [in traditional haiku you would not use 'I' the minute you do ..you are bound to become subjective..your thoughts, opinions, fantasies, you do not make a judgement about what you see] [ a single rose lays/ on a snow covered grave/ footprints]

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/24/2012 9:15:00 AM

Well..verse 1/you do have lines 1 & 2 gramatically joined that's a +..you should not used [winter bleached white] it is you making a judgement about the state of the man's metaphoric heart..haiku tries to stay OBJECTIVE/factual ...also line 3 is sumjective Verse 1 shows use 2 parts which is a + too but line three would be called 'cause & effect' based on your personal conclusions ..verse 1 is not haiku BUT could be senryu for you can be subjective in a senryu! BBS Light & Love

Joy Wellington
Date: 10/25/2012 5:53:00 AM

Gotcha, duly noted...still learning and striving for perfection...under your tutelage, am going to ace it soon. Tnx Debbie!

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 10/24/2012 10:23:00 AM

Joy haiku has a strong FOCUS on a literal image, sight sound taste smell..your 3 very good verses do not show us a scene. You are telling a story, not showing, no reason at all to call them haiku they could be, senryu or Free verse or Verse

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/23/2012 7:49:00 PM

Joy, .. thanks for your nice haiku... always~PD

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/23/2012 4:10:00 PM

these are wonderful Joy, like these very much...

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/23/2012 11:10:00 AM

Very good Haiku Joy, feel some sadness. - Oxox / / Anne-Lise :)