Daver Austin Poet Senryu

Frightening Things

FRIGHTENING THINGS

i’m in the chapel
       it’s night    the room is empty
                              loud c minor chord!

old mansion
    boarded-up
         chimney smoking

ruined mansion
    boarded-up
        window lit near the top

piano recital
moonlight sonata
mouse!

my roommate 
    weird smile
        unusual eye teeth

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Kabuteng P.Ink K. June 8, 2012 at 11:36 AM Hi Daver :) I really enjoyed reading this, I liked the short lines here, makes for more suspense!! And enjoyed how the mouse is in there too ;) So cool :D hugs to you!!

Harry Horsman May 31, 2012 at 8:26 AM Love these Daver, poems in rapid fire, and so much one reads in them. harry

Brenda Victoria Northeast May 31, 2012 at 3:22 AM Well done Daver had me shivering eek : )

Andrea Dietrich May 30, 2012 at 11:02 PM hi, Daver. thanks for coming by my poem today. How have you been? ARe you happy summer is pretty much here??

Sara Kendrick May 29, 2012 at 3:45 PM Cute one with such few words..I can just see this scene..Thanks for stopping by...Sara

Michelle Mac Donald May 29, 2012 at 10:35 AM Oh Daver, you had me laughing LOL I guess that sweetling must almost have felt like one of the "frightening things" when she looked at you with eyes like emeralds embedded in moss? You crack me up!!:)) In reality Mognome was a tiny painted turtle...having no resemblance to any of those characters. I"m still giddy..hehe Best wishes, Love, Mikki

Elizabeth Wesley May 28, 2012 at 6:04 PM That old mansionhas some odd things going on in the wee hours. I especially love the moonlight sonata by th mouse I presume! :)

Michelle Mac Donald May 28, 2012 at 3:47 PM I wonder what those "unusual eye teeth" were looking at Daver? Lots happening here...a haunting tale, for sure!! Even the mouse sounds scary..LOL Best wishes, Love, Mikki

Andrea Dietrich May 27, 2012 at 5:47 PM daver, I never nailed a picture that way as in my poem, but I like the George Clooney idea of yours!!

Nette Onclaud May 27, 2012 at 9:58 AM spooky yet delightful, daver...your imagery is downright unique... right on! :) huggs!

Andrea Dietrich May 26, 2012 at 5:36 PM Daver, I enjoyed the pictures each of these senryu created. I particularly liked the first one. that was GREAT and EERIE.

Russell Sivey May 26, 2012 at 9:34 AM Wow the fear that these lines instill into me! I really enjoyed the magnificence that these senryu portrays! Truly amazing write my friend! Great Work!!

James Peranteau May 26, 2012 at 8:51 AM *smiles* Have a wonderful weekend dear poet friend of mine ! Much love, james

Kathryn Collins May 26, 2012 at 8:08 AM Dave, Dave, Dave - Thank God I'm reading this in the a.m. Each 3 lines are more frightening than the one before. This goes into my favorite poems. vlad