Free Ride

So I started to see you but I kept selling my tickets and you You started to be beautiful and you you didn't even know it I started to like you tonite and today OK This ticket is free

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Denis Joe

Date: 12/10/2008 9:54:00 AM

A great poem: Succinct and full of itself. I like that 'So' and 'OK' are given their own lines as it helps to create two narratives within the one. The lines are exquisite. ‘You started to be beautiful’ made me realise that it is writing such as this that makes poetry such a great art form. But also within that feeling lies the link between the writer and the reader; the thing that sparks the imagination.

Christopher Higgins

Date: 12/9/2008 9:56:00 AM

He was a good boy thus the ride is free. Love it.