Free Love

And wanna rush to sea And be on beach together And listen foamy surf To water dip the barefoot When even waves will stay Us to will play star Valse And we shall dance on sand When lying hand in hand And wanna rush to sea And Heat and light And time to give my dear And we are strat to do this night P.S.sorry for the mistakes I know English very bad I will be grateful for criticism and tips for correcting errors

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Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 3/25/2013 8:17:00 PM

Dear Nick, Hope this finds YOU and YOURS Healthy and High in the Spirit. A Very warm Welcome to POETRYSOUP.I do not see anything wrong with YOUR English, though this is only the 2nd POEM of YOURS I have read. I like YOUR P.S. it is a sign that YOU are reaching out for advice and YOU will get that here on the Soup. If YOU have any ?s ask anyone on the Soup if they don't know the answer they will direct YOU to someone who DOES. Again Welcome to the Family of POETS. With LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry

Gypsyof Essence

Date: 3/12/2013 4:17:00 AM

Hi I was checking out new poets, came across yours... Welcome!!! GypsyofEssence