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Fractured Soul

Shes sits in her worn out familiar chair As the sun wakes for the day Her being weary before the day begins From wishing her life away Nothing matters anymore Old now, completely bereft He’s been gone a few months Alone , nothing left They lost their only child As a beautiful young adult A lifetime of grieving Being the result It should never be that way Your child leaves earth before you Their profound,pure love for each other Is how they got through She sits motionless ,eyes closed Her mind consumed of days gone by Her whole being aches , tears fall She breathes one loud , last sigh

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Debjani Mitra

Date: 11/7/2023 1:33:00 AM

So relevant for the unfortunate people who have to grieve their children death and or suffering in their last days. This is said to be the heaviest of all sorrow. Such a soul touching topic chosen

Deb M
Date: 11/7/2023 1:43:00 AM

Thankyou so much Debjani….lovely to meet you! Debx

Terry Flood

Date: 10/13/2023 3:55:00 PM

It’s a wicked irony that when two people in grief see the other as their rock, one or other of them will ultimately be left to fight on alone. A terribly sad but we’ll written poem, Deb.

Deb M
Date: 10/16/2023 4:03:00 AM

Thankyou Mr Flood….always a pleasure! Debx

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 10/13/2023 9:42:00 AM

This is what my father said. He was still in good health but told us he was too tired to keep going. He had seen too many of his children die. So he lay down one day and never got up again.

Deb M
Date: 10/16/2023 4:03:00 AM

Oh bless your dad Jerry…that is so sad my friend! Cuddles Debx

Jan Allison

Date: 10/12/2023 11:31:00 AM

Deb please pop by my poem 'The Unsupervised Stop Sign', whilst both parents are very much alive they lost their 2 sons in tragic circumstances:-(

Deb M
Date: 10/16/2023 4:02:00 AM

Will do Jan! Debx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/12/2023 6:09:00 AM

Your poem speaks to many who have endured such mighty grief. Splendidly emotive poem my friend.

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:28:00 AM

Aww thanks Vijay….always a pleasure….Debx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/12/2023 2:42:00 AM

Seems we are on the same wavelength today, although I left the readers to decide the outcome of such a situation. Still, I loved your poem. So emotional. Blessings.

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:27:00 AM

Wow thats quite the comment from you ….l appreciate it greatly my friend….Cuddles…Debx

The Situation

Date: 10/11/2023 7:19:00 PM

This is a reality for many who never write.

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:26:00 AM

Thanks TS….Debx

Tania Kitchin

Date: 10/11/2023 4:04:00 PM

Deb, a heartfelt sad poem, well penned.

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:26:00 AM

Hey Tania….thanks for your kind words! Debx

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/11/2023 3:28:00 PM

your poem all but brought me to tears...I've heard there's no more painful than outliving one's child. My mother-in-law outlived two of her four children...the loss took its toll on her. Anyway, your poem was powerful...will fave this one..enjoy your evening, Sara

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:25:00 AM

Another lovely comment and fave….3 faves on one poem l think is a first for me l do believe….so thankyou Sara! Debx

Lin Lane

Date: 10/11/2023 3:09:00 PM

My children mean the world to me, and through them, my grandchildren. I'm faving this one, too, Deb. Love and hugs, dear friend.

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:23:00 AM

Love and cuddles right back at ya Lin and thankyou so much for the fave! Debx

Jan Allison

Date: 10/11/2023 2:45:00 PM

I am so choked up at the scene that i am at a loss what to say Deb, this is the most poignant piece of poetry I have read in a long while, a huge fave. i cant imagine the pain of losing a child , then a spouse and being so alone in this world. hugs jan xx

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:21:00 AM

Jan that is probably kthe most complimentary comment l have had…so from the bottom of my heart thankyou sweet Jan! and a fave to top it up!…Debx