Four Jets Streak Blue Sky

four jets streak blue sky directional opposites.. three pelicans soar

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Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/10/2012 4:13:00 AM

lovely flight for a 'ku, sara... enjoyed the imagery!..:) huggs!

Jack Horne

Date: 4/7/2012 7:11:00 AM

love this one, sara. it's great to read your poetry again

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/6/2012 11:20:00 AM

Those pelicans can soar very fast and usually travel in V-formation. From your haiku, the reader gets a very clear image of the jets as well as the pelicans. Awesome, Sara! Love, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/5/2012 10:56:00 PM

wow, this is REALLY nice, Sara. Way to do a haiku.(so pelicans soar?)

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 4/6/2012 11:20:00 AM

You bet pelicans soar. They fly very fast and quite high here.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/5/2012 9:23:00 PM

Hi, Sara, nice to have you back.... this is a very lovely haiku... how was your vacation? always..pd

Matthew Anish

Date: 4/5/2012 8:27:00 PM

Nice image about what you see when you look up to the heavens. Peace & love Matthew Anish

John Loving Iii

Date: 4/5/2012 7:18:00 PM

this is real haiku. why because the future is in contrast with the past. good thinking.