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Footprints

cresting waves
carry waning sunlight--
footprints vanish
 
      *     *     *      
 
gold
oozes
from the sun 
like ambrosia   
infusing the sea
with honeyed wine
'til each wave
glitters
gold 
 
waves
roll in
to dance with
waning sunlight
past florid shorelines
where footprints fade
erased by
cresting
waves


For Debbie's "Metamorph" contest

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/1/2013 6:02:00 PM

Heather, Congratulations :-) In Debbie's "Metamorph" contest. always~ PD

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/29/2013 2:17:00 PM

Great poetic quality..Great descriptive lines ...I can see the scene..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Congrats on your win..Sara

Painted Hunter

Date: 4/29/2013 6:21:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Heather!...though I expected this one to be higher up...

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 4/28/2013 9:31:00 AM

Congrats on your deserving win Heather~A.O

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/25/2013 4:39:00 PM

I so connect with your writing, you paint such breathtaking pictures. Congratulations.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/25/2013 3:49:00 PM

We can see your love for the ocean! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 4/25/2013 10:15:00 AM

Many congratulations Heather luv , well done

Karen Anglesey

Date: 4/4/2013 5:51:00 PM

HEather, your dazzling verses with the breezy flow and imagery make this Stunning. I will have to study this format. It's lovely

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 3/28/2013 11:02:00 AM

I really like both versions of this poem. I think the advantage of haiku is that it lets the mind fill in the details, whereas longer forms allow the author to do so. The details and descriptions in the second one give it more life in my opinion. It appears brighter and busier.

Jeremy Martin

Date: 3/27/2013 9:18:00 PM

This poem glows. It would like up the dark!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/27/2013 1:48:00 AM

just outstamding : )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/27/2013 12:09:00 AM

wow, you did an amazing job. I don't know which one I like better the first or second!! both are so well done, dear!

Jack Jordan

Date: 3/26/2013 9:25:00 AM

I confess to not knowing the definition of "metamorph," but only because I hadn't read the competition requirements. I like your entry very much, a real contender. Jack

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/25/2013 4:17:00 PM

Yeah YOU! You did it and well! You can title it anything you want hon? Thanks for the entry was it fun? Light & Love

Painted Hunter

Date: 3/25/2013 1:58:00 PM

I can't wait to do one for this contest...yours is really good. It's hard to say what you want with a form like this, but you pulled it off in spectacular fashion.

Kash Poet

Date: 3/25/2013 1:02:00 PM

Beautiful!Can visualise it.