Heather Ober Poet Ninette

Footprints

cresting waves
carry waning sunlight--
footprints vanish
 
      *     *     *      
 
gold
oozes
from the sun 
like ambrosia   
infusing the sea
with honeyed wine
'til each wave
glitters
gold 
 
waves
roll in
to dance with
waning sunlight
past florid shorelines
where footprints fade
erased by
cresting
waves


For Debbie's "Metamorph" contest

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Poet Destroyer A May 1, 2013 at 6:02 PM Heather, Congratulations :-) In Debbie's "Metamorph" contest. always~ PD

Sara Kendrick April 29, 2013 at 2:17 PM Great poetic quality..Great descriptive lines ...I can see the scene..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Congrats on your win..Sara

Painted Hunter April 29, 2013 at 6:21 AM Congrats on your win, Heather!...though I expected this one to be higher up...

Abdulhafeez Oyewole April 28, 2013 at 9:31 AM Congrats on your deserving win Heather~A.O

Richard Lamoureux April 25, 2013 at 4:39 PM I so connect with your writing, you paint such breathtaking pictures. Congratulations.

Debbie Guzzi April 25, 2013 at 3:49 PM We can see your love for the ocean! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl April 25, 2013 at 10:15 AM Many congratulations Heather luv , well done

Karen Anglesey April 4, 2013 at 5:51 PM HEather, your dazzling verses with the breezy flow and imagery make this Stunning. I will have to study this format. It's lovely

Isaiah Zerbst March 28, 2013 at 11:02 AM I really like both versions of this poem. I think the advantage of haiku is that it lets the mind fill in the details, whereas longer forms allow the author to do so. The details and descriptions in the second one give it more life in my opinion. It appears brighter and busier.

Jeremy Martin March 27, 2013 at 9:18 PM This poem glows. It would like up the dark!

Charmaine Chircop March 27, 2013 at 1:48 AM just outstamding : )

Andrea Dietrich March 27, 2013 at 12:09 AM wow, you did an amazing job. I don't know which one I like better the first or second!! both are so well done, dear!

Jack Jordan March 26, 2013 at 9:25 AM I confess to not knowing the definition of "metamorph," but only because I hadn't read the competition requirements. I like your entry very much, a real contender. Jack

Debbie Guzzi March 25, 2013 at 4:17 PM Yeah YOU! You did it and well! You can title it anything you want hon? Thanks for the entry was it fun? Light & Love

Painted Hunter March 25, 2013 at 1:58 PM I can't wait to do one for this contest...yours is really good. It's hard to say what you want with a form like this, but you pulled it off in spectacular fashion.

Kash Poet March 25, 2013 at 1:02 PM Beautiful!Can visualise it.