Foiled

It shone Finally, the rain had fallen An end to the dust monologue And then Like foil unwrapped Unmasked Naked It lay infront of me Helpless Hopeless They wailed again Their bellies screaming The voices gone The scars of their tears blinked Only for a second The river began to flow again I wondered Why the weather changed it's colors so fast!

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Ann Okotha

Date: 8/28/2009 1:09:00 AM

In my country,many are facing hunger and there is lots of famine, the rainy season lasted all too short and the sun scorched too long. Thanks all for the comments. They have revived the energies to continue scribbling. GBU

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/27/2009 7:33:00 AM

Not sure of what you speak. Nicely written anyway. I like line two and three and also the last line. Keep writing. Sar

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/27/2009 7:29:00 AM

Thank you for sharing your splendid poetry with us today Ann. Love, Carol