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Focused Love

Boys don't make passes at girls who wear glasses??

----------------------------------------Focussed Love-------------------
Her gorgeous eyes
jeopardize men,
in ties of love. 

Glasses she wore
to abhor them,
ignore passes

Focused lens woo,
inside view deep
"I too love you".

Dated 30th January, 2019
Than Bauk Poetry Contest
Sponsor Charles Messina
Syllable Counter of poetrysoup  4 in each of 9  line

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Date: 2/15/2019 7:28:00 AM
Ahhh, there you go "Perfect" Wonderful poem, Debjani. Good luck with this form in the future . I too am a beginner and I have slipped up on many forms before (lol) We learn as we go and that's a beautiful thing. Thanks for the soupmail. God Bless,,,,Charlie
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Date: 2/13/2019 3:50:00 PM
well written Debjani, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/10/2019 9:36:00 PM
Debjani, In your last stanza, the 2nd line was off so I had to place you low. "view needed to be the 3rd syllable. Nice poem though. Charlie
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Debjani Mitra
Date: 2/15/2019 2:06:00 AM
Hi Charles, Yes it was a slip... I corrected it by rearranging the line. Thanks for the honor. It was so fun to write in this form..My first time good you liked it.
Date: 1/29/2019 2:51:00 PM
very nice. you did three!! I find this a difficult form just to do one in!!
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Debjani Mitra
Date: 1/31/2019 2:40:00 AM
Thanks for uplifting my spirit.. I found it exciting.. each time struggling with syllable counting.. To limit your thoughts in 4 is tough