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Focused Love

Boys don't make passes at girls who wear glasses?? ----------------------------------------Focussed Love------------------- Her gorgeous eyes jeopardize men, in ties of love. Glasses she wore to abhor them, ignore passes Focused lens woo, inside view deep "I too love you". Dated 30th January, 2019 Than Bauk Poetry Contest Sponsor Charles Messina Syllable Counter of poetrysoup 4 in each of 9 line

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Charles Messina

Date: 2/15/2019 7:28:00 AM

Ahhh, there you go "Perfect" Wonderful poem, Debjani. Good luck with this form in the future . I too am a beginner and I have slipped up on many forms before (lol) We learn as we go and that's a beautiful thing. Thanks for the soupmail. God Bless,,,,Charlie

Jan Allison

Date: 2/13/2019 3:50:00 PM

well written Debjani, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina

Date: 2/10/2019 9:36:00 PM

Debjani, In your last stanza, the 2nd line was off so I had to place you low. "view needed to be the 3rd syllable. Nice poem though. Charlie

Debjani Mitra
Date: 2/15/2019 2:06:00 AM

Hi Charles, Yes it was a slip... I corrected it by rearranging the line. Thanks for the honor. It was so fun to write in this form..My first time though..so good you liked it.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/29/2019 2:51:00 PM

very nice. you did three!! I find this a difficult form just to do one in!!

Debjani Mitra
Date: 1/31/2019 2:40:00 AM

Thanks for uplifting my spirit.. I found it exciting.. each time struggling with syllable counting.. To limit your thoughts in 4 is tough