Fluff

Snowflakes are falling
Softly landing on the ground...
Winter ground covering
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Deeks Avatar
February 3, 2012 at 6:19 PM
I adore this write ... Haiku... Primarily as it seems so light and breezy yet it has solid forms entwined with light ones. Almost placed in a pattern, which in my eyes surrealistically represents a snowflake.I know I sound like I've lost it but that's how I see it.. Karen Deeks
Eastman Avatar
February 3, 2012 at 1:51 PM
Enjoyable write.
Guzzi Avatar
January 31, 2012 at 2:02 PM
now here you have 1 subject and 2 actions falling & landing and the 3rd line doesn't shift away from the topics so there is no juxtapostion/ try 1 haiku about the snow falling, then one about the snow covering the ground and make sure to PULL BACK or step aside of the image and let us feel something else [or smell it or taste it?] Light & Love
Susan Avatar
January 31, 2012 at 11:18 AM
nice image - what do you think of the old brown snow? the white snow is so pretty at first...
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January 31, 2012 at 1:28 AM
aaawww, so fluffy!! i love it, love everything fluffy. beautiful haiku carol
Dietrich Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 8:47 PM
Aha, here is our motivation for the contest. Snowflakes make GREAT fluff, Carol!!! thanks for being such a great force for good here at Soup.
Lane Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 2:25 PM
Nothing but rain up here.
Sivey Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 2:15 PM
Thank you for my great placement in your contest...I really appreciate that a lot! You are so kind! This Haiku is spectacular, and as you posted this it was happening right then! Now it has mostly melted away today! That way we get the pleasure of the snow and then it leaves us so we can go about our chores! Great Work
Merryman Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 11:58 AM
Your haiku has created a pretty picture. Thanks for sharing and thank you also for your encouraging notes and comments. Love, Kim
Devnath  Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 11:14 AM
Nicely worded the inter touch of nicotine and joy. Loved much where your words are genius, loved, bl
Scholtz Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 10:48 AM
Good one Carol, thank you for your congrats, love Elizabeth
Dennis Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 8:45 AM
Good one!
Squyres Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 8:31 AM
ohhh I like this haiku...lovely !!
Davis Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 7:55 AM
Sounds like what was happening here in Brussels today :-)
Poet Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 7:50 AM
very good haiku by you Carol.I think this is happening there right now.
Andresen Avatar
January 30, 2012 at 5:43 AM
Lovely Carol,lovely. oxox love Anne-Lise
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