Fluff

Snowflakes are falling Softly landing on the ground... Winter ground covering

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Karen Deeks

Date: 2/3/2012 6:19:00 PM

I adore this write ... Haiku... Primarily as it seems so light and breezy yet it has solid forms entwined with light ones. Almost placed in a pattern, which in my eyes surrealistically represents a snowflake.I know I sound like I've lost it but that's how I see it.. Karen Deeks

Carol Eastman

Date: 2/3/2012 1:51:00 PM

Enjoyable write.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/31/2012 2:02:00 PM

now here you have 1 subject and 2 actions falling & landing and the 3rd line doesn't shift away from the topics so there is no juxtapostion/ try 1 haiku about the snow falling, then one about the snow covering the ground and make sure to PULL BACK or step aside of the image and let us feel something else [or smell it or taste it?] Light & Love

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 1/31/2012 11:18:00 AM

nice image - what do you think of the old brown snow? the white snow is so pretty at first...

M.I.A .

Date: 1/31/2012 1:28:00 AM

aaawww, so fluffy!! i love it, love everything fluffy. beautiful haiku carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/30/2012 8:47:00 PM

Aha, here is our motivation for the contest. Snowflakes make GREAT fluff, Carol!!! thanks for being such a great force for good here at Soup.

Tony Lane

Date: 1/30/2012 2:25:00 PM

Nothing but rain up here.

Russell Sivey

Date: 1/30/2012 2:15:00 PM

Thank you for my great placement in your contest...I really appreciate that a lot! You are so kind! This Haiku is spectacular, and as you posted this it was happening right then! Now it has mostly melted away today! That way we get the pleasure of the snow and then it leaves us so we can go about our chores! Great Work