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Gentle ripples float about his wheels, searching inquisitive around spokes, questioning apparent lack of motion, now the little fish turn their backs and swam back. Eyes intrinsically profoundly fixated on innermost thoughts, where loud voices debate the time away in warm orange evening glow, fleece quilt for curious stars Ears catch finest nuances in vibration inside, the soft rumble ebbs into loud roar of high tide and first waves leap and lap at his numb feet with never ceasing hunger As if with sorrow, he pulls the rims and wheels himself out, thoughts collected and arranged in fluctuations Undulations and arranged back into working order *** February 18, 2017

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Date: 2/20/2017 12:04:00 AM
This one is all feels my friend. I love the water words both wet and figurative <3
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Darren White
Date: 2/20/2017 12:13:00 AM
Sara, thank you! Love the alliteration :) <3
Date: 2/18/2017 9:23:00 PM
Darren your poems are so filled with powerful emotion and expression, it almost pains me to read, as I wish for you the stars, joy and happiness, all that you so rightly deserve.
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Darren White
Date: 2/18/2017 11:23:00 PM
Thank you Arthur, I would liked stars, joy and happiness. My boyfriend gives me happiness, my friends do too, you all here do.
Date: 2/18/2017 8:14:00 PM
A poem of substance, incredibly well written. To not feel you can count on your body is a feeling I am familiar with and trying to find a sense of the norm, something, anything to trust, is exhausting, frustrating and usually causes more physical pain and drains the spirit. A bit of kindness towards self goes a long way plus you have the soup!! :-) You have more strength than you know, are an inspiration to others, me included. all else fails, I read Jan's limericks to laugh! blessing, lynn
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Darren White
Date: 2/18/2017 11:22:00 PM
It's a real terrible thing to not be able to trust your body, isn't it? It fails me in so many ways! I am slowly finding my strength. Thank you Lynn, for all your kind comments and encouraging words.
Date: 2/18/2017 4:47:00 PM
Deeply written poem. What is really normal what is norm for me it isn't for the other, but we still proceed. Thank you so very much for reading my poem :) Hugs Eve
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Darren White
Date: 2/18/2017 11:19:00 PM
Thank you Eve, and you're welcome :)
Date: 2/18/2017 2:04:00 PM
Well written Darren. I know what it is like trying to get back to normal although different circumstances. Take care :)
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Darren White
Date: 2/18/2017 2:06:00 PM
Thank you so much, Heidi :)
Date: 2/18/2017 1:53:00 PM
A deep piece my friend...we all want to get back to normal
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Darren White
Date: 2/18/2017 1:56:00 PM
Yes, my friend, and I am having an EXTREMELY hard time to.... Hope you do better.

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