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Flattened Coins

She kneeled down on the track To put some coins on their back Waiting for the train to come In order to see the coins become flat She thinks this is such a sport Watching the coins again retort Wait, listen, she here's a whistle The coins last plea to turn and abort Quickly the train comes and goes Flattening the coins with her rejoice She finds luck in her changed coins Brought to her by the trains keen voice Russell Sivey

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 8/6/2011 10:08:00 PM
I just saw your note to me about your wanting to name the girl Penny too. well, you know what they say about great minds!
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Date: 8/6/2011 9:23:00 PM
YEs, this is what I had her doing too. Great idea! One little suggestion for you. To win well, you have to do triolet form. If you click on "forms" at the top, you will see an example of how to do triolet. I am sure this one can be made to fit that form! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 8/6/2011 8:45:00 PM
Brings back memories of silly things we used to do. Enjoyed this.
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Date: 8/6/2011 7:21:00 AM
I like the lightness of the work but it could be metaphoric for something more serious..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 8/6/2011 6:23:00 AM
a good poem of memories for me i like this good writing
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Date: 8/6/2011 3:15:00 AM
Suffering moley holy, to turn n abort , very busy train in out multi verses, n snortin puffin oughtof... lost the thread sortov... good one mate
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