Russell Sivey Poet Rhyme

Flattened Coins

She kneeled down on the track
To put some coins on their back
Waiting for the train to come
In order to see the coins become flat
She thinks this is such a sport
Watching the coins again retort
Wait, listen, she here's a whistle
The coins last plea to turn and abort
Quickly the train comes and goes
Flattening the coins with her rejoice
She finds luck in her  changed coins
Brought to her by the trains keen voice

Russell Sivey

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Andrea Dietrich August 6, 2011 at 10:08 PM I just saw your note to me about your wanting to name the girl Penny too. well, you know what they say about great minds!

Andrea Dietrich August 6, 2011 at 9:23 PM YEs, this is what I had her doing too. Great idea! One little suggestion for you. To win well, you have to do triolet form. If you click on "forms" at the top, you will see an example of how to do triolet. I am sure this one can be made to fit that form! Luv, Andrea

Elizabeth Wesley August 6, 2011 at 8:45 PM Brings back memories of silly things we used to do. Enjoyed this.

Sara Kendrick August 6, 2011 at 7:21 AM I like the lightness of the work but it could be metaphoric for something more serious..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Steven Cooke August 6, 2011 at 6:23 AM a good poem of memories for me i like this good writing

Don Johnson August 6, 2011 at 3:15 AM Suffering moley holy, to turn n abort , very busy train in out multi verses, n snortin puffin oughtof... lost the thread sortov... good one mate