Beautiful Scars Poet Rhyme

Five Letter Words

After Sara’s sadly death,
white doves began chime-
Sara’s hubby Brady found hymns,
their music began sorry rhyme.

Brady seeks prose epics,
poems Sara’s heart would savor-
Jenny might speak truth about Sara’s pains,
maybe she’ll spare vague facts midst favor. 

Sappy tears sooth Sara’s Grams, 
angel wings dream hazel light-
Three girls plant fancy lilac trees,
Mama’s heart broke; gives Brady sight.

                   Every woman cried,
                   every bloke bayed-
                   Papa’s spine flush,
                   Mama’s roots evade.

                                  Quiet ocean waves bring death peace,
                                  great Sara’s heavy heart shan’t cease. 




*about a girl Sara I know who took her life. She had a husband named Brady and three daughters*

Five Letter Words Contest
435 letters total in this poem
87 words total in this poem

Sponsor: Rhoda Tripp
December 17, 2017

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Line Gauthier May 5, 2018 at 8:36 PM Wonderfully done, Laura. Belated congrats on your well deserved win.

Gregory Richard Barden January 20, 2018 at 3:13 AM Congratulations on your win, Luloo - this was a very tough exercise, and I am honored to be on a list with such wonderful writers! Blessings, Friend! :-)

Subimal Sinha-Roy January 15, 2018 at 5:22 AM Congratulations, Laura on your great win.

Curtis Moorman January 14, 2018 at 10:45 PM Congratulations, dear luloo! You are always in the winner circle and I admire your work.

Jan Allison January 14, 2018 at 8:12 PM many congrats LuLoo:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper January 14, 2018 at 6:37 PM Congratulations on your win, Laura, nicely done! . Hugs Eve ~`*

Sandra Haight January 14, 2018 at 4:06 PM Congratulations, Laura, on your well-deserved podium win for your excellent five-letter-word poem in this most challenging contest! Hugs, Sandra Beautiful Scars January 14, 2018 at 4:34 PM thank you sweet Sandra :)-luloo

John Gondolf January 14, 2018 at 3:28 PM Luloo, congrats dear poetess, nicely done! John Beautiful Scars January 14, 2018 at 4:34 PM many thanks sweet John : )-luloo

Rhoda Tripp January 14, 2018 at 3:25 PM Congratulations. Soup mail me regarding your gift card. Rhoda Tripp January 14, 2018 at 5:08 PM Gift card sent. Happy New Year to you as well, My Dear. Beautiful Scars January 14, 2018 at 4:34 PM thank you so much sweet Rhoda! I just souped you now :) Be blessed! and happy new year :) Laura Loo

Jan Allison December 29, 2017 at 9:29 AM such a sad story Luloo, good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Beautiful Scars January 8, 2018 at 11:19 AM many thanks dear Jan :) -luloo

Andrea Dietrich December 21, 2017 at 2:32 PM A sad tale you told with your five letter words, Laura. I saw your remark to Caycay so I wanted to come see what you came up with. It's really cool how you got in the rhyming as well! Not easy to do at ALL!!! Beautiful Scars January 8, 2018 at 11:19 AM it was challenging! thank you sweet Andrea :)-luloo

Supraja Kannan December 21, 2017 at 6:32 AM A deep write...But beautifully written... Great one for the contest... Beautiful Scars January 8, 2018 at 11:18 AM thank you sweet Supraja :)-luloo

Susan Ashley December 20, 2017 at 8:00 PM Wow, Laura a truly soulful and heartbreaking write beautifully, sensitively and poetically expressed with emotional eloquence and elegance - and even more impressive still when you consider the word restrictions. Difficult and challenging content for a difficult and challenging contest. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan Beautiful Scars December 21, 2017 at 6:21 AM many thanks sweet Susan! You are always so kind :) I found it challenging to be honest. It took me over an hour and a lot of trial and error. thank you :) -luloo

CayCay Godwin December 20, 2017 at 5:02 PM Sure doesn't seem like you were overly challenged - you've got more 'guts' in your poem than any I've read thus far. I don't like you anymore! I am only kidding. This is impressive and substantial considering the restriction of words. You done good ... CayCay Beautiful Scars December 21, 2017 at 6:20 AM lol thanks sweet Cay Cay :) you're so silly, it took me over an hour to write, I did find it very challenging but the story is true to life. thank you :) -luloo

Joanna Daniel December 19, 2017 at 6:45 AM Such an awesome poem, Laura, you have done excellently:) Beautiful Scars December 21, 2017 at 6:19 AM thank you sweet Jo :)-luloo

Cheryl Hoffman December 17, 2017 at 8:07 PM This is an awesome poignant write for the contest Laura; Good luck in the contest!~Che :) Beautiful Scars December 18, 2017 at 5:09 AM thank you sweet Cheryl :) -luloo

Silent One December 17, 2017 at 2:34 PM Suicide is a very difficult subject to write about and you this is so well using the strict guidelines... Beautiful Scars December 18, 2017 at 5:09 AM many thanks dear SO! I didn't realize how difficult this would be! :) Be blessed -lullooo

Eve Roper December 17, 2017 at 1:47 PM Nicely done, Laura, good luck in the contest Eve ~`* Beautiful Scars December 18, 2017 at 5:08 AM thank you sweet eve! :)-luloo