Shadow Hamilton Poet Villanelle

Fisherman

The fisherman sat on the bank
patiently he waits for a bite
but his reel stayed very lank

He wanted to score a good rank
but was having no luck at this site
the fisherman sat on the bank

A few nibbles and his reel sank
his bait gone, words he did incite
but his reel stayed very lank

With a splash his reel it did tank
with a whooping enormous bite
the fisherman sat on the bank

The gods up above he did thank
 his luck he believed not quite
but his reel stayed very lank

By now he had got very dank
and shaking off a pesky mite
the fisherman sat on the bank
but his reel stayed very lank

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Stacey Brown March 17, 2014 at 8:44 AM enjoyed this very much, thanks for sharing, many blessings, Stacey Shadow Hamilton March 17, 2014 at 7:03 PM ty Stacey big hugs

Tim Smith March 16, 2014 at 8:07 PM Sounds like my fishing Shadow..I might not be a good fisherman but I am a huge lover of nature. So either way I win...Excellent Villanelle....Tim Shadow Hamilton March 17, 2014 at 7:05 PM ty Tim I have not the patience lol an hour and I am done hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen March 16, 2014 at 3:55 PM - Skillfully written, Shadow - I read with big eyes - admire your work! - Luck in contest - hope you win. - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Shadow Hamilton March 16, 2014 at 5:12 PM ty Anne Lise hugs

Richard Lamoureux March 16, 2014 at 9:15 AM This seemed like a rather frustrating experience for this poor fellow. I will have to check out the contest. Good luck Shadow. Shadow Hamilton March 16, 2014 at 5:12 PM do Rick although this is not entered I put The Fishing Trip in it an old write. ty hugs

Paul Callus March 16, 2014 at 5:50 AM Now you've got me hooked on this Villanelle; I have to do something about it and have a go at it. Thanks for your support, too. :) // paul Shadow Hamilton March 16, 2014 at 6:02 AM pay attention to both syllable count and rhyme !st and 3rd sentences are very important as they repeat gl and ty hugs

Poet Destroyer A March 15, 2014 at 11:42 PM Hello Shadow, this kind of reminds me of my dad.. :) Many times, when we would go fishing, his reel, never moved... Poor, dad.. The mosquitoes made him twitch more, than his poor fishing line ever did.. Enjoyed this... Thank you so much for the awesome entry in my contest.. LOL, I had no idea it was a Cheeta.. I'm actually thinking of running a What Am I part 2... JUST MAYBE!! ;) Honestly, I was surprised, the contest closed in less than a week. guess it was to easy:)... Love ~LINDA Shadow Hamilton March 16, 2014 at 5:58 AM shows how much you were missed Linda remember dad fishing in Ireland in pouring rain for hours never got a nibble lol ty hugs