Fire

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Written on May 17th, 2025 for Suzette Richard's Elements of Nature Poetry Contest - Fire

Flames swallow oxygen, duplicitous in their deeds, circumventing steel barriers— steel barriers doubling over. Ashen soot cakes the walls; walls crumble, interlacing with soot. Pyres of fire lick the night sky; crimson smoke suffuses the air. Breathing in microparticles, microparticles sticking to fibrous membranes— breathing collapses. Lit match—ignition, cinders glow.

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Ink Empress

Date: 5/18/2025 8:28:00 AM

I love the loop lines, must be also in rules of the form ? I am inspired to try this, and how youv written for this prompt is brilliant i especially loved the opening! I am not surprised that youv picked the prompt fire! Best wishes! Sending you light always

Roxanne Andorfer

Date: 5/17/2025 11:22:00 AM

And good luck with the contest!

Sara Jama
Date: 5/18/2025 5:46:00 AM

Thank you ver much.

Roxanne Andorfer

Date: 5/17/2025 11:20:00 AM

Excellent imagery! I like this poem! I'm going to start following your poetry. Keep up the good work!

Sara Jama
Date: 5/18/2025 5:46:00 AM

Thank you for the kind words.