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This is a form of poetry that was introduced to me by Mick Talbot. It's called "Rhyming Wave Poetry" I hope I did it right (lol) If not, I do hope you enjoy the poem. PS: I wrote this about my precious granddaughter 16 months old Ava Rose

Feathers Down

Her cheeks as soft as feathers down 
Feathers down, feathers, feathers down 
When she smile doth I'll never frown 
When she sleep, light, dimmer
 
Her weeps and cries, I'll comfort her 
Yes comfort, comfort, comfort her 
In her tiny ears, a soft whisper
In her, diaper, I'll try
 
Hush little darling do not cry 
Do not cry, do not, do not cry 
Papa's going to dry your eye 
Papa's lullaby, sleep
 
Soon enough she falls asleep 
She falls, she falls, she falls asleep 
She sleeps soundless without a peep 
She sleeps, myself I crown
 
Her cheeks as soft as feathers down 
Sleeping soft, myself I crown
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Talbot Avatar
May 19, 2018 at 12:00 AM
Wo, 2 thirds of a wow, LOL, Lines 1 to 3 are iambic tetrameter, line 4 iambic trimeter if you put it through a syllable counter this one https://www.howmanysyllables.com/syllable_counter/ you'll find that dropped 'w'. I am still impressed though. Mick
Messina Avatar
May 21, 2018 at 8:15 AM
Thanks again Mick, one of these days I'll get it all right (lol) so much appreciate all the advice and getting to talk and know you a little better.. have a great day my friend! Charlie
Lamoureux Avatar
May 17, 2018 at 8:58 AM
What a delightful write and a wonderful tribute to your grand baby.
Messina Avatar
May 17, 2018 at 2:54 PM
Thank you Richard, It seems I made a few mistakes trying to write this form of poetry. I updated it a little, and I will do so until I get this damn thing right (lol). I really do appreciate all your visits and kind words...!
Talbot Avatar
May 17, 2018 at 3:48 AM
WOW! Impressed I am! Now, how to get PS administration to add the form to their list. I've tried with forms I've invented, not even a response! Really well done Charles, feel a new contest coming on. Mick
Messina Avatar
May 17, 2018 at 4:13 AM
Whew! So glad I passed the audition, as Lennon would say! They should really take a fine look at your form and add it to their list, it's a brilliant form for sure. Thanks for the feedback and kind words, my friend...I'll be waiting for that contest (lol) Well, off to fishing I go today! I'll stop by when I get back...Charlie
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