Falling Into Ocean, Sinking Into Sea

Like falling into stillness - like stars that make no sound, I’m falling into ocean; there’s nothing I can do, and ever since a person’s birth, there is no solid ground. Tears have made this ocean, and with all humanity, I’m foundering while drowning, sinking into sea. Time, the endless grains of sand, surrounds these depths of blue. After so much time, who’ll remember you or me? And at this ocean’s bottom, whatever will be found? For Kai Michael Neumann's Falling Poetry Contest

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Date: 6/5/2020 2:20:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Andrea. I liked this one a lot! xxoo
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Date: 6/1/2020 4:18:00 PM
Andrea this is really poetry at its best with such depth! Loved it. An instant fave. Congratulations on your win :)
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Date: 6/1/2020 8:49:00 AM
Yes, who will remember us? Andrea, CONGRATS on your well-deserved win! Janice
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Date: 6/1/2020 5:49:00 AM
Beautiful alaways Andrea. Congratulations on your win, Kai
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Date: 12/11/2016 12:23:00 PM
A very touching poem. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 11/9/2016 3:13:00 PM
a reflective work worthy of praise, andie... a wiiner!..congrats and huggs
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Date: 11/9/2016 6:56:00 AM
Hi Andrea, You have penned a sad thought provoking write..Congratulations on your fine win.It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 11/8/2016 1:53:00 PM
just beautiful Andrea :) thank you for being a part of my contest and congratulations on your placement :) -luloo
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Date: 11/6/2016 6:04:00 PM
This is beautiful and yet sad. We can feel like we are sinking to the bottom and if we do who will miss us. Deep thoughts about who will remember us when we are gone. See my new poem you gave me some inspiration to write it. I have so much of a writers block recently. love phyl
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Date: 11/6/2016 9:46:00 AM
This is an amazing awesome winner, Andrea:) you sure are anything but falling... I like the deep imagery :)
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Date: 11/5/2016 11:10:00 AM
Like Maurice says, Wow, that is deep as deep as the ocean.
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Date: 11/4/2016 9:20:00 AM
WOW, WOW, WOW...A FAV...
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Date: 11/3/2016 9:42:00 PM
How can one forget a poem as poetic as this or a poet as beautiful as you?
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Date: 11/3/2016 5:57:00 PM
Beautifully blue.
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Date: 11/3/2016 2:01:00 PM
Even when you must write using a "specific rhyme scheme," you always pen meaningful verse, Andrea. The next to last line is a subject I explored with Paul in "The Day She Disappeared." Time clears the slate; we are forgotten. Carl Sandburg explored this as well in his poem "Grass." Deep and profound poetry, my friend. You're Aces!
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Date: 11/3/2016 12:17:00 AM
Interesting metaphor here. I like the phrase "stars that make no sound". Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 11/2/2016 10:06:00 PM
I'm faving this before the FAVs run out. I'm sure you just got 1 place, at least from me. This is amazing, beautifully amazing ... CayCay
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Date: 11/2/2016 6:20:00 PM
Very nicely penned Andrea...GL in the contest..
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Date: 11/2/2016 4:29:00 PM
Beautifully worded but sad and defeated. Like there is no hope. Nicely written though. Good luck on the contest. God Bless, JB
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Date: 11/2/2016 4:21:00 PM
This is a beautiful poem Andrea. A 7
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Date: 11/2/2016 11:19:00 AM
This was sadly beautiful. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 11/2/2016 9:01:00 AM
Before that terrible termination, it is nice to go through the perception of this intellectual beauty ...
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Date: 11/2/2016 9:00:00 AM
I always find peace there, Andrea. Beautiful poem!
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Date: 11/2/2016 4:47:00 AM
Dismally floundering, a real sinking feeling in your aptly written words Andrea. Good luck with the contest.
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Date: 11/2/2016 2:44:00 AM
Excellent. Lovely imagery write with nice rhyme. ENjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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