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Fall Shades, On the Ochred Phloem

Senses are aware of a cavernousness, And of a stillness almost quietley abrupt..! softness of light & air surround all, deft as breath as from a doves wing reposing billows of liquid descending are as grains, the seeds of an "almost raining" A lowering of horizion encompasses, Valley, ridge, and outcropping crag's the listening atmosphere waits... breathless as soil is enriching Close by mammals disturb the folds of fallen bracken, with bursts of muffled sound, as hand in hand lovers stroll around Poem by Joe Maverick copyright 27 9 2011 This poem is for Michael J. Falotico's falling in love in the fall contest:)

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Date: 12/28/2012 4:59:00 PM
Great romantic twist to this one..Enjoyed reading this eve..I am glad that I chose this one to read..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 9/1/2012 4:32:00 PM
One that I missed ages ago..Very romanticly written..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 9/1/2012 4:32:00 PM
One that I missed ages ago..Very romanticly written..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 6/6/2012 8:51:00 PM
Ah, you are the master of images and intrigue, Joe. Feels like a forced reclusive silence, a time for "a doves wing reposing", perhaps a time for reconciliation "as hand in hand lovers stroll around". A lovely though profound write, Joe! Best wishes, Love, Mikki
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Date: 6/2/2012 3:39:00 PM
I can value every word here, much can be demonstrated with your breath taking passionate walking image alone. I'm carrying a sweet sensation with the circles around the soon to be asleep sun,.. I want this sweet shady sensation, even if it disturbs other peaceful light ... i love your second couplet the most.. it brings out the softness in your write.. love your overwhelmed falling in love win..xox~PD
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Date: 6/2/2012 3:31:00 PM
Hi, Joe,, oh! My I'm having the worse trouble on line today.. can't even seem to load a page.. gees! maybe I should stop loading that music up?????
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Date: 3/17/2012 12:08:00 AM
Joe, thanks for what you said about my March poem. My mom used to say that expression too.
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Date: 2/14/2012 9:55:00 AM
{wow a very different take on fall..have you ever hayed a field?] Hey where are your new writes get write BUB! Light & Love
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Date: 11/21/2011 11:24:00 PM
Coming back to this one. It was very cool, especially the wording of those last two lines!
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Date: 10/23/2011 11:16:00 AM
Lovely imagery and you done it in your unique way, absolutely enjoyed this gem and I saw congratulations are in order as well. Hope you are doing okay :) Wilma
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Date: 10/9/2011 4:21:00 PM
Wow Joe such words of love.I appreciate your sweet comment and try it you'll like it.~LOL~Teresa
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Date: 10/8/2011 8:28:00 PM
Congratulations on a deserving win in Michael's Contest, Joe. Love, Annalise
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Date: 10/7/2011 8:40:00 PM
oohh I love the lichen and the moss and the bracken! Congrad's on your win. Light & love
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Date: 10/7/2011 7:24:00 PM
congrats on your win in the contest, now this is what I call a beautiful write, every word perfectly placed...I don't think I've read any of your poems before, but I shall certainly look out for more :-)
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Date: 10/7/2011 4:47:00 PM
Great write Joe... You did my contest proud.... congrats my friend....always Michael
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Date: 10/7/2011 2:46:00 PM
Joe, I'm sorry you couldn't find the winners' list. Soup seems to be having some technical difficulties again. But you are definitely a winner in this contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/7/2011 8:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Michael's "Falling in Love in the Fall" contest Joe. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/7/2011 12:08:00 AM
Joe you are a very skilled artist with imagery. Congratulations on your win. I must apologize for taking so long to congratulate you but i have been having problems with my internet and also with ps down, I am really delayed. My apologies. Lee
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Date: 10/6/2011 3:44:00 PM
congrats on your win in the contest.. free spirit
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Date: 10/6/2011 2:13:00 PM
So happy to see your wonderful poem in the winners' circle, Joe. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/6/2011 12:39:00 AM
So I see you won with this one? Congratulations, some awesome imagery in it!!
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Date: 10/6/2011 12:06:00 AM
Congrats Joe on an outstanding win with these lovely lines of creativity .. my friend..luv..
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Date: 10/5/2011 7:57:00 PM
picture painted of the fall, lovers hands grip the thrall, little mammals scurry all, but rain falls here today:) great poetry cobber mate !
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Date: 10/7/2011 6:51:00 PM
yes Joe old mate, it is quite great, as i believe it is, keep writing no debate, the wordsmith always is...
Date: 10/2/2011 6:43:00 PM
You describe the signs of the changing season so well my friend. Excellent verse. God Bless, JB
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Date: 10/1/2011 2:43:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your creative fall work..Reads like a winning piece to me..I was blessed to have the opportunity to read your creative work..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara
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