Facing the Red Sea

As a child, this reoccurring dream haunted.
When I would run from a monster chasing me
Then he'd reach out to grab, I'd fly undaunted.
As time went by, from those dreams seemed free.
Now knowing it was death, I face the red sea     

Of course, as you can tell. I have no idea about stressed and unstressed syllables. LOL

childhoodiambic pentameter

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Abdullah Alhemaidy

September 10, 2023 at 2:47 PM

Hello Sara, Red Sea is the most wonderful sea in my view and many other people too- its colors, its fishes. But, its beach is not smooth.

Sara Kendrick

September 11, 2023 at 2:51 AM

Abdullah, I have not been to a country where I could view the red sea, but I am giving reference to a passage from the Bible where Moses parted the Red Sea and saved the Hebrew nation from being killed by the Egyptians who had been holding them as slaves. The feeling that death(the Egyptians) was chasing me and needing God to perform a miracle for me like He did for Moses. Trapped so to speak. Thanks for the visit and nice review of my work. I will have to look up pictures of the Red Sea. Sara

Hiya Sharma

September 10, 2023 at 1:46 AM

Oh, this is such a poignant and gloomy write, somehow pulls the heartstrings. I must say that you've done a phenomenal work for the Iambic pentameter and it's quite intriguing to read for me as o haven't tried writing one yet.. "Now knowing it was death, I face the red sea" The nightmares that repeat themselves in cycles, suffocating our peace and teasing our innocent hearts until we realise that we face the red sea of a fatal silhouette.. Creatively done, thought-provoking definitely!

Sara Kendrick

September 10, 2023 at 3:24 AM

Hiya, I don't really do meter. I just tried but I am sure it is not correct. We all face death in our lives. Some of us are given a chance to make things right with anyone we may have hurt. Thanks for dropping by and taking time to comment. Your visits encourage. Sara