Bl Devnath Poet Senryu

Excess Is Out

pour pure milk
                                           in a drum exceeds.......
                                              excess's out................

                                              wets outside
                                         mixes with own smells
                                              keep colors

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Dorian Petersen Potter October 9, 2014 at 1:11 PM I like keeping the colors for me best BL! ;) Nice Senryu duet my friend. Hugs! Love peace and light! xxx D. Bl Devnath October 9, 2014 at 1:15 PM Thanks my beautiful friend for your beautiful comment. Loved always,bl

Carolyn Devonshire October 8, 2014 at 3:15 PM In warm weather, cold liquids do leave a frosting on the container, but as you say, the container keeps its own colors, BL. I see a bit of Robert Frost's "Fire and Ice" in this one. Well done! Love, carolyn Bl Devnath October 9, 2014 at 8:16 AM Thanks my lovely friend for your nice comment. Loved always,bl