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Everything Now Is

#1 Laying in a pool of my disintegration I realized that I am not the only one What you will see when you are ending Is now everything that has just begun #2 Laying in a pool of my disintegration I realize we are together in oblivion What I cannot see after my expiration Is now everything for you to envision

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Skat A

Date: 5/23/2015 10:54:00 AM

WOW, NOW THAT'S AS INTERESTING AS THE TITLE.

Regina Branham

Date: 7/10/2011 10:53:00 PM

Gigno, L1 you are speaking in the 'present' tense - L2 in the 'past' tense - the 'future' tense in L3 and then back to the 'present' tense in L4 I hope you understand what I am trying to point out to you. Not to pick apart your poem but, to strengthen it. See, if you are writing in present tense - it should follow that tense - same with past tense. Tenses can change if they follow the sequence of the action they are describing. Otherwise it confuses the reader. Hope this helps. Regina