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Evening Idyll

Birds fly formation
towards pink spun sugar clouds 
Into tomorrow.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Callus Avatar
April 2, 2021 at 7:46 AM
Finally I managed to get through, Suz!! I can't remember how many times I tried to comment, in vain. It must have been a glitch. I like your imagery, but most of all the parting end line! ~ Warm regards // paul
Delaney Avatar
April 2, 2021 at 11:51 AM
Hey Paul: So lovely to see you managed to beat the glitch. Thanks for taking the time to read and stay in touch. SuZ
Hicks Avatar
March 22, 2021 at 9:00 PM
Oo ... I think I might like this one even more than the last one I read from you. "Pink spun sugar clouds" is a wonderful phrase. Flows right off the tongue.
Delaney Avatar
April 2, 2021 at 11:52 AM
So glad you like that one, Tim: I Australia we called it fairy floss. SuZ
Kendrick Avatar
March 5, 2021 at 4:28 AM
It looks so easy and wonderful to see them flying but I know it must be very hard and tiring for them. Great work you have penned about their flight. I can't tell what kind of birds they are in the photo. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara
Delaney Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 6:10 AM
I’m not sure either, Sara: Would venture to sat starlings. It was an image found on Pixabay. Thanks for another lovely comment. SuZ
Mays Avatar
November 30, 2020 at 10:05 PM
You've done it again--spun magic. "pink spun sugar clouds" Only you could come up with that. And I love your last line about flying into tomorrow.
Delaney Avatar
December 1, 2020 at 5:02 AM
Thanks Carol: your kind words mean a lot to me.
One Avatar
November 16, 2020 at 6:18 AM
Sublime imagery... Another lovely haiku..
Delaney Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 6:08 AM
Thanks SI. Hope you are keeping well and safe. SuZ
Cunningham Avatar
November 16, 2020 at 4:01 AM
Another stunning image Suz, so much in so few words. Tom
Delaney Avatar
December 1, 2020 at 4:20 AM
Thanks Tom: my hubby had a fall so writing has been on hold. Hope all is well with you. Best, SuZ
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