Eternally Waiting

She told me never to send her flowers
For they are pesky things just waiting to die
I told her never to ask me how she looked
In some certain dress for I dare not tell a lie
So we both just sat there thinking
That this life held no further surprise
But then came next morning, lying in our bed,
We became a feast for the flies!

Those endearments we prescribe
To our most cherished ones
Can never hope to describe
Just how much they resemble the lovely sun
But if you wait for the perfect moment
To speak up load and clear
You'll be waiting evermore
On a two way street, built of fear!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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September 26, 2018 at 1:09 PM
Very deep thoughts, Timothy, but a bouquet of flowers i know it doesn't last but they are a comfort of life that puts a sweet scent in the air if you are not allergic too.. enjoyed reading.. It was nice to see my cousin Lucy comment ; it brought all the great moments I enjoyed with her. Oh,,, and she was an immaculate person everything had its place.
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March 21, 2013 at 7:56 AM
This is a very good poem eventhough I don't like flies. they give me a spooky feeling. In 2010 I had a bad expirence with files that appeared out of nowhere and no matter what I did - they would not go away. They lasted 7 days. I keep my house very clean. Lucilla
Hicks Avatar
March 21, 2013 at 9:12 AM
7 days? Sounds like a nightmare! However I do admit the only insect the really make me nervous are bees. I don't know why I hate them so much (their stings don't even hurt that bad) but I can't stand being in the same room with them.
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March 19, 2013 at 4:12 PM
wow, wow... imagine that, a couple who agree on compromising what makes our relationships nice and flowing. I have had these flies on me,,,lol.....the good thing is when the love up and left... so did i...why stick around the boring emotionless walls.... enjoyed...LINDA
Hicks Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 4:36 PM
I'm not sure how true this stay to the Grook form, but it felt right at the time. Compromise is key and so is a sense of adventure and newness. Thanks again :)
Haick Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 10:36 PM
: ) Reading this Tim, you know... sometimes with us women, you just can't win! LOL Totally enjoyed! Annalise
Hicks Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 11:53 PM
Haha... didn't think this would inspire that kinda comment, but I laughed reading it.
Breidenthal Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 9:01 PM
Cleverly written...this verse was so exciting! I really like your style in this one particularly. Looks like I found another brilliant poet! Always, Laura
Hicks Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 9:05 PM
Thanks once again Laura! I am so humbled to have gained some fans on the Soup :)
Dietrich Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 2:18 PM
gosh, how horrible. It sounds like you both woke up having been murdered in your sleep with that feast for flies line!! anyway, I get the message and it's a great one.
Hicks Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 8:46 PM
Reading that over again I guess that does imply murder... but I was meaning they just died of natural causes. Either way the message would still be the same... glad you liked!
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