Eternal Teardrops

She loved him dearly; many times she bled
The thought of parting piercing like a dart
The lifeless body ’cross her lap now spread
His head she cradles with most tender care
With acquiescence she avoids despair
Although there’s sorrow chiselled in her heart
And frozen teardrops waiting to be shed.

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Rhyming scheme: A-B-A-C-C-B-A
Contest: Rhyme Time 6
Sponsor: Laura Loo
Placed 1st
© 24th August 2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Marine Avatar
November 25, 2019 at 1:23 PM
Hi Paul, thank you for directing me to your beautiful poem inspired by "La Pieta." There is tender understanding of the emotions Mary must have gone through with the sacrificial death of her firstborn son. She knew from prophecy what was coming- "With acquiescence she avoids despair..." And the last two lines masterfully intimate at feelings unseen by the observer. So much brought to life of this incredible relationship, and the absolute trust they showed in the redeeming acts of God! ((Hugs))AM
Callus Avatar
November 26, 2019 at 7:38 AM
Thank you for looking up my poem, Aqua. Your insightful comments are truly appreciated. Best regards // paul
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November 14, 2018 at 3:31 PM
Mastefully-composed, Paul! Congratulations on a well-deserved first place win! Regards, John.
Callus Avatar
November 14, 2018 at 4:22 PM
Many thanks John. Sometimes luck tends to smile on us:) Regards // paul
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October 12, 2018 at 11:20 AM
Hi Paul, Congratulations on all your wins. Your poetry is consistently well penned and your writes are always excellent. This poem is vivid, painful and sad. Best regards, Jennifer
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October 13, 2018 at 8:48 AM
Thank you, Jennifer...you are kind and generous; your support and insightful comments are appreciated. Best regards // paul
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September 15, 2018 at 6:20 PM
This is poetry at its best Paul! Belated Congratulations on your win! A very deserving First Placement! ; )
Callus Avatar
September 16, 2018 at 5:01 AM
Thank you for the lovely, complimentary feedback and congrats, Connie:) Hope you're having a pleasant weekend. Regards // paul
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September 11, 2018 at 6:04 AM
many times she bled...wow amazing line and poem...thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement...:)-luloo
Callus Avatar
September 11, 2018 at 3:42 PM
Thank you for the high placement, Laura! A pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul
Daniel Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 3:15 AM
Sad, yet so touching, Paul:)
Callus Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 6:00 PM
You sum it up in two fitting words, Jo...thank you. Regards // paul
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August 29, 2018 at 5:10 PM
Elegant intricate ink weave, Paul. You evoke feelings of joy and sorrow w/this emotional gem of a poem. Love and best wishes always.
Callus Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 5:58 PM
Your critique is much valued, Freddie...thank you! Best regards // paul
Ashley Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 10:38 PM
There is so much deep emotion in this poem, both mortal and immortal.. I can't help but feel that her eternal teardrops (tears of joy) will water the flower of their eternal life.. though your poem seems sad on the surface, you lovely and thought provoking title leads me towards bliss, Paul. A beautiful and tender piece my wonderful friend.. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan
Callus Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 11:43 AM
Thank you, Susan. Your insightful comments uplift the heart of those who believe in an eternal afterlife. Death is the bridge between mortal and immortal. ~ Warm regards & hugs, my friend. // paul
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August 26, 2018 at 12:49 PM
Lovely piece my friend...best of luck Paul...a winner in my court...love & light...^WW^
Callus Avatar
August 26, 2018 at 5:33 PM
Thank you for your generosity, WW. best regards // paul
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August 26, 2018 at 7:10 AM
Well written Paul. This is exactly how it can be for someone in this heartbreaking situation. I hope all is well :)
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August 26, 2018 at 8:12 AM
So pleased you liked it, Heidi. Thank you for your visit and comments. Regards // paul
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August 26, 2018 at 1:25 AM
What a sad poem, Paul...so expressive of the deep sorrow of losing a loved one.
Callus Avatar
August 26, 2018 at 4:01 AM
Thank you, Carole. Sadness and sorrow combine to bring forth inspiration. Regards // paul
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August 25, 2018 at 9:22 PM
Well done, Paul. You packed your metaphors with emotion sure to please in this contest. All the best ... CayCay
Callus Avatar
August 26, 2018 at 3:59 AM
Thank you for reading and liking, CayCay. Enjoy the rest of theweekend. Warm regards // paul
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August 25, 2018 at 11:12 AM
An impressive rhyming masterfully written dear, Paul! Good luck!
Callus Avatar
August 25, 2018 at 1:12 PM
Thank you, Demi...a pleasure to have you stopping by, my friend. Regards // paul
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August 25, 2018 at 10:11 AM
You cleave my heart with this poem today Paul, thank you for your condolences. I am slowly bringing out all the memories she imparted. Have a blessed day, hugs.
Callus Avatar
August 25, 2018 at 1:28 PM
Thank you, Pixie. When death separates mother and child mixed emotions run high. May memories of your mother be there to guide when the going gets hard. Blessings // paul
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August 25, 2018 at 9:21 AM
Excellent, Paul. The bitter sadness...the thought of parting...those frozen teardrops
Callus Avatar
August 25, 2018 at 9:56 AM
Thank you, Kim. Some moments are frozen for eternity! Regards // paul
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August 25, 2018 at 8:56 AM
Oh my Paul, this is a sad one. I feel it will do well in the contest. If we think beyond this moment we are flooded with Joy. Thankfully He lives.
Callus Avatar
August 25, 2018 at 9:17 AM
Thank you for liking, Richard, but even more for the uplifting insightful comments that followed. Regards // paul
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August 25, 2018 at 8:30 AM
This is so deep and beautiful. Enjoyed it... Good luck in the contest.
Callus Avatar
August 25, 2018 at 8:50 AM
Thank you, Supraja. Both complimentary comments & good wishes are appreciated. Regards // paul
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August 24, 2018 at 2:58 PM
such a touching piece Paul, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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August 24, 2018 at 4:03 PM
Thank you, Jan. Hope you have a lovely weekend:) Hugs // paul
Green Avatar
August 24, 2018 at 10:35 AM
This was beautifully sad. A very touching and well written piece. The emotions are deeply felt.
Callus Avatar
August 24, 2018 at 11:14 AM
Most times there is beauty in sadness, Chris. Thank you for the complimentary remarks. Regards // paul
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August 24, 2018 at 7:20 AM
The epitome of a strong deep rooted Love empowering a bereaved heart and soul to yield to fate in grace! A brilliant Rhyme Paul! A captivating imagery and message! A great pleasure to read. A FAV. Be blessed always.
Callus Avatar
August 24, 2018 at 11:12 AM
The first two lines of your feedback are a poem in themselves, Besma. Thank you for the lovely comments and fav...they are truly cherished. Warm regards // paul
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August 24, 2018 at 7:05 AM
Loss of loved one exudes the emotions you so well depicted Paul..best for a win.
Callus Avatar
August 24, 2018 at 11:09 AM
Thank you, Vijay. Sad emotions flow and inspire. Regards // paul
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August 24, 2018 at 6:47 AM
My friend, I couldn't help but think of the Kennedy assassination while reading your touching rhyme. It describes so tenderly to me the scene just after the shot was fired. I'm headed out with an appointment to address my problems, but was lucky to catch this first. Best wishes in the contest, Paul! Love, Carolyn
Callus Avatar
August 24, 2018 at 10:29 AM
Yes, Carolyn, it could easily apply to the Kennedy assassination, though in my case it was Michelangelo's genius which inspired this. Thank you for being the first to comment. Hope your appointment will be more fruitful than previous ones. Love, paul
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