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Entwinement

Bleeding around me are empty faces Sad, drooping spaces, crumpled places Melancholy for the light of new places Stuck in time, frozen in time The pangs of lonesome fill their sagging hearts Frowning forever, frowning forever Let me stare blankly at the stained wall Nothing at all…nothing at all The mind is a scary place The mind is a distraction From the reality ever binding Curbing every reaction The mind is overwhelming The mind is oh so sad When we turn to larvae and graves It’s an never-ending... Entwinement Found myself looking through the tiny hole in the wall Watching you fall, watching you fall Scared for the neck that would break us all You shuddered my blood…shuddered my blood I met the eyes of the souls of your feet Twitching and swinging…unfeeling…unfeeling Please allow me this sole ease: Just be with me... lie with me The mind is a scary place The mind is a distraction From the reality ever binding Curbing every reaction The mind is overwhelming The mind is oh so sad When we turn to larvae and graves It’s an everlasting... Entwinement -inspired by Mad World by Gary Jules- -also inspired by the stop motion film: The Man in the Lower-Left hand Corner of the Photograph-

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Date: 5/4/2012 1:57:00 PM
I agree that the mind can be a difficult thing to comprehend; often leading us to places we should never have contemplated going. Great write!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/7/2012 6:31:00 PM
Indeed. Thanks for taking the time to read it! :)
Date: 5/4/2012 1:47:00 PM
That's a dark and dramatic expressed story. nice rhyme and flow. God bless you. Hugs!Erich
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/11/2012 1:40:00 PM
Thankies!
Date: 5/2/2012 1:06:00 PM
SPINE-TINGLING, but amazing, LAURA! - DWB
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Date: 5/1/2012 11:09:00 AM
This was creative work that I enjoyed reading this afternoon..I am glad that I chose this one to read..I like the texture of the work..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/7/2012 6:32:00 PM
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed! It's always a pleasure reading your work.
Date: 5/1/2012 9:59:00 AM
Smile ˜ The Repetitive Sequence Works Well Within The Format Of Something Or Another? ˜ Although, I Must Admit, I Left Melancholy Hanging Upon The Rafters Calling Desperately Unto Myself As, I Shut Evermores Door Unto Its Theatres Entrance &, Jumped Into A Cab & Said, If I Can Make Here Then Make It Anywhere; New York New York ˜ My Love, Always, John!:) ˜
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/7/2012 6:32:00 PM
I'm not exactly sure what you meant there with the ship, but it sounded awesome. And thank you so much for your support. You're awesome.
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Date: 5/1/2012 10:05:00 AM
...."Tis Suppose To Read, 'If I Can Make Here, Then I Can Make It Anywhere.'" *
Date: 5/1/2012 9:41:00 AM
Laura yep the is mind is very scary at times, I like it..David
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Date: 5/1/2012 7:35:00 AM
I don't know about the mind, but reading this sure was an entwinement... lol Keep it up, Laura
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/7/2012 6:33:00 PM
Thanks! Nice to hear from you again!
Date: 5/1/2012 4:05:00 AM
We will revisit the grave with fresh flowers for those letters that continue to whisper our names. Very nice.
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Date: 4/30/2012 8:54:00 PM
Far out Laura, you sting the reader with emotion and amazement with your words. I'm impressed with the depth of this! Luv, Lizzie
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/7/2012 6:34:00 PM
Thanks! (:
Date: 4/30/2012 8:49:00 PM
This is a gem,Superb write dear poet.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/7/2012 6:34:00 PM
Your support is a gem; thanks so much!
Date: 4/30/2012 5:35:00 PM
Feels like a single beating heart in a desolate landscaping, really interesting use of imagery
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/11/2012 1:42:00 PM
Hahah...David. Thanks.
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J.W. Earnings
Date: 5/10/2012 1:37:00 PM
XD Oh yeah! I AGREE! GOOD JOB SISTAH!

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