Laura Breidenthal Poet Rhyme

Entwinement

Bleeding around me are empty faces
Sad, drooping spaces, crumpled places
Melancholy for the light of new places
Stuck in time, frozen in time
The pangs of lonesome fill their sagging hearts
Frowning forever, frowning forever
Let me stare blankly at the stained wall
Nothing at all…nothing at all

The mind is a scary place 
The mind is a distraction
From the reality ever binding
Curbing every reaction
The mind is overwhelming
The mind is oh so sad
When we turn to larvae and graves
It’s an never-ending...
Entwinement 

Found myself looking through the tiny hole in the wall
Watching you fall, watching you fall
Scared for the neck that would break us all
You shuddered my blood…shuddered my blood
I met the eyes of the souls of your feet
Twitching and swinging…unfeeling…unfeeling
Please allow me this sole ease:
Just be with me... lie with me

The mind is a scary place 
The mind is a distraction
From the reality ever binding
Curbing every reaction
The mind is overwhelming
The mind is oh so sad
When we turn to larvae and graves
It’s an everlasting...
Entwinement

-inspired by Mad World by Gary Jules-
-also inspired by the stop motion film: The Man in the Lower-Left hand Corner of the Photograph-

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Elizabeth Wesley May 4, 2012 at 1:57 PM I agree that the mind can be a difficult thing to comprehend; often leading us to places we should never have contemplated going. Great write! Laura Breidenthal May 7, 2012 at 6:31 PM Indeed. Thanks for taking the time to read it! :)

Erich Goller May 4, 2012 at 1:47 PM That's a dark and dramatic expressed story. nice rhyme and flow. God bless you. Hugs!Erich Laura Breidenthal May 11, 2012 at 1:40 PM Thankies!

David William Breidenthal May 2, 2012 at 1:06 PM SPINE-TINGLING, but amazing, LAURA! - DWB

Sara Kendrick May 1, 2012 at 11:09 AM This was creative work that I enjoyed reading this afternoon..I am glad that I chose this one to read..I like the texture of the work..Thanks for stopping by..Sara Laura Breidenthal May 7, 2012 at 6:32 PM Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed! It's always a pleasure reading your work.

John Rhinem May 1, 2012 at 9:59 AM Smile ˜ The Repetitive Sequence Works Well Within The Format Of Something Or Another? ˜ Although, I Must Admit, I Left Melancholy Hanging Upon The Rafters Calling Desperately Unto Myself As, I Shut Evermores Door Unto Its Theatres Entrance &, Jumped Into A Cab & Said, If I Can Make Here Then Make It Anywhere; New York New York ˜ My Love, Always, John!:) ˜ Laura Breidenthal May 7, 2012 at 6:32 PM I'm not exactly sure what you meant there with the ship, but it sounded awesome. And thank you so much for your support. You're awesome. May 1, 2012 at 10:05 AM ...."Tis Suppose To Read, 'If I Can Make Here, Then I Can Make It Anywhere.'" *

David Williams May 1, 2012 at 9:41 AM Laura yep the is mind is very scary at times, I like it..David

M. Hussain Effendi May 1, 2012 at 7:35 AM I don't know about the mind, but reading this sure was an entwinement... lol Keep it up, Laura Laura Breidenthal May 7, 2012 at 6:33 PM Thanks! Nice to hear from you again!

Chittaranjan Dey May 1, 2012 at 4:05 AM We will revisit the grave with fresh flowers for those letters that continue to whisper our names. Very nice.

Elizabeth Wesley April 30, 2012 at 8:54 PM Far out Laura, you sting the reader with emotion and amazement with your words. I'm impressed with the depth of this! Luv, Lizzie Laura Breidenthal May 7, 2012 at 6:34 PM Thanks! (:

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet April 30, 2012 at 8:49 PM This is a gem,Superb write dear poet. Laura Breidenthal May 7, 2012 at 6:34 PM Your support is a gem; thanks so much!

Justin Debrosse April 30, 2012 at 5:35 PM Feels like a single beating heart in a desolate landscaping, really interesting use of imagery Laura Breidenthal May 11, 2012 at 1:42 PM Hahah...David. Thanks. David William Breidenthal May 10, 2012 at 1:37 PM XD Oh yeah! I AGREE! GOOD JOB SISTAH!