Enlightenment

Initially intended as a lyric, I wrote this in iambic pentameter. I'm interested in any feedback, much appreciated. Enjoy. Your distant posture softens when I near, Despite the pledge that you are quite content. That smile returns, your eyes shed their veneer, Remembering those wild nights we spent; Our bodies burning with enlightenment. We drank the sacred wine and freed the dove That soared through our unstable atmosphere. And for awhile it nobly thrived above The saboteurs determined to appear; Contriving doubt and casting out its spear. You met your share of charlatans who knew The secrets to the alchemy of love. The rumors of their magic were untrue But still the fantasy fit like a glove With just a little tweaking and a shove. I pardoned guilt and from inaction rose Onto the pedestal I overthrew. But all the deities that I impose Have failed to move me where your spirit blew. Condemned to dust because they were not you. From day to night the hours politely went, Like nervous children shifting in their rows; Afraid of what the silence might present. Perhaps a revelation to suppose, Depending on the future that it shows.