Empty

Empty
like bottled air
clinging to nothing real,
except to slippery inside walls
of space

Empty 
like heart chamber
holding on to first love
bouncing back and forth, side to side
then gone

Empty 
like nerve feeling
continued ceaseless pain
until all feeling is dissolved
or cold

Copyright © 2011  By Caryl S. Muzzey

First Place Winner ~ "An Old or New" Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
July 20, 2011

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Carrie Richards

July 14, 2011 at 7:49 AM

Wonderful ..... Such description is better than good....coming from a place that surely is NOT empty, but filled with poetry! :)Congrats

John Freeman

July 14, 2011 at 7:42 AM

Caryl, Great job, Congratulations on your first place. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

July 14, 2011 at 5:24 AM

Congrats Caryl on your first place win with these awesome words my friend..enjoy with luv..

Carol Sunshine Brown

July 14, 2011 at 5:14 AM

Congratulations Caryl on your win in the "A Old Or New" contest sponsored by Brian Strand. Love, Carol

James Foulk

April 20, 2011 at 1:50 PM

love this piece you wrote. thank you for commenting on Sweet Erika.

Carolyn Devonshire

April 17, 2011 at 11:25 AM

This is an awesome description of the way it feels to suffer from deep depression, Caryl. The emptiness seems endless. Many of us have fallen into this pit of despair, but thankfully we usually rise up to find the light of hope again. My mother lived most of her life this way. To feel "full" again, we have to find motivation within ourselves. A favorite for me; it reminds me so much of Mom. Love and blessings for a happy Easter, Carolyn

Carol Sunshine Brown

April 13, 2011 at 6:41 AM

What a beautiful sunny day here at my house. I am so happy to be able to read your outstanding poetry this morning Caryl. I hope you will enjoy your day and that you find inspiration along the way. Wishing you the best in the contest. Love, Carol