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like bottled air
clinging to nothing real,
except to slippery inside walls
of space

like heart chamber
holding on to first love
bouncing back and forth, side to side
then gone

like nerve feeling
continued ceaseless pain
until all feeling is dissolved
or cold

Copyright © 2011  By Caryl S. Muzzey

First Place Winner ~ "An Old or New" Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
July 20, 2011

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Date: 7/14/2011 7:49:00 AM
Wonderful ..... Such description is better than good....coming from a place that surely is NOT empty, but filled with poetry! :)Congrats
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Date: 7/14/2011 7:42:00 AM
Caryl, Great job, Congratulations on your first place. Agape, Moses
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Date: 7/14/2011 5:24:00 AM
Congrats Caryl on your first place win with these awesome words my friend..enjoy with luv..
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Date: 7/14/2011 5:14:00 AM
Congratulations Caryl on your win in the "A Old Or New" contest sponsored by Brian Strand. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/20/2011 1:50:00 PM
love this piece you wrote. thank you for commenting on Sweet Erika.
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Date: 4/17/2011 11:25:00 AM
This is an awesome description of the way it feels to suffer from deep depression, Caryl. The emptiness seems endless. Many of us have fallen into this pit of despair, but thankfully we usually rise up to find the light of hope again. My mother lived most of her life this way. To feel "full" again, we have to find motivation within ourselves. A favorite for me; it reminds me so much of Mom. Love and blessings for a happy Easter, Carolyn
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Date: 4/13/2011 6:41:00 AM
What a beautiful sunny day here at my house. I am so happy to be able to read your outstanding poetry this morning Caryl. I hope you will enjoy your day and that you find inspiration along the way. Wishing you the best in the contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/13/2011 12:19:00 AM
I find this poem to be filled..well..filled with emptiness...and much discription! enjoyed today Caryl.
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Date: 4/12/2011 11:31:00 PM
wow, your synonyms of empty all are so cool in this poem. Very nice cinquain writing here!!
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