Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Eco-Friendly

Eco-friendly?

The Prius was so quiet
That none of the kids spied it
As it sped around the corner
And struck Lil’ Jack Horner

The driver didn’t stop 
As the kids stood there in shock
Lil’ Jack landed with a CRACK!
And lay unmoving, on his back



Susan Burch
The prius actually is very quiet, so I created an extreme situation to make people think about that, the consequences of eliminating volume in a normal everyday vehicle.

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Shadow Hamilton January 25, 2014 at 4:45 AM Scarey Susan I can picture it good write congrats on featuring Shadow x smile hug

Poet Destroyer A December 19, 2011 at 11:37 PM Susan, a late~ congratulations on your wonderful win. In my "you pick a poem contest" ;-) Thank you for the support,.hope you are enjoying your holidays~.p.d.

Carol Sunshine Brown December 19, 2011 at 5:31 AM Congratulations on your super win in P.D.'s "It's Up To You" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Kash Poet December 18, 2011 at 3:26 AM Very nice!Congratulations Susan on your win.

Andrea Dietrich December 18, 2011 at 12:06 AM wow, Susan, I have finally come across a poem of yours I had never seen before. If it did not win in that one car contest, well, I am glad to see it finally won in THIS contest because it is quirky and fun and I just really like it! congratulations.

Bob Quigley December 17, 2011 at 2:23 PM My neighbor has one and when out walking my dogs, I never hear him approaching from behind. Not a good thing. Good write Susan. Congratulations

Jack Horne June 14, 2011 at 1:39 PM I'm glad it was Jack Horner and not Horne LOL. It's good to see you writing poems again : )

James Foulk June 10, 2011 at 11:34 AM a cute little rhyme, a great one you wrote here. thank you for commenting on Howling winds.

Zzzzz Zzzzz June 10, 2011 at 10:09 AM An interesting spin on this theme. Eco-friendly is not so friendly when lives are at risk. A good write, Susan. If this is for the contest, and I guess it is, good luck! Love and best wishes, Robert.

Carol Sunshine Brown June 10, 2011 at 5:14 AM Wishing you a wonderful day and weekend too. I enjoyed reading your poetry this morning Susan. I hope your weekend is filled with love and joy and you find your soul filled with inspiration. Love, Carol