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Echoing Vacant Sound

Rising above the destitute land
Barren are the quiet hills now
Echoing terrain's vacant sound
There, where sweet home was.

Tree uprooted quivers gently
Its scattered mangled remains
Swaying aches of forsaken pain
Mourning tranquility's death. 

In solitude this climb he treks 
Aspiring zest of rising dawns
As they concede to sullen days
Looking for her presence
Ever since the oldest tree fell
And the lone bird fled its nest.

The sunrise still evokes her name,
So does her beloved sunset.

Despite the dearest hopes he held 
She never returned this way.

March 5, 2019
Placed first: Standard contest #190 by Brian Strand

Copyright © Vijay Pandit | Year Posted 2019

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Kai Michael Neumann Date: 5/26/2019 3:43:00 AM Echoes of a vacant sound ...that is a magical metaphor. Thank you, Kai Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 5/26/2019 7:48:00 AM Much appreciate Kai..many thanks.

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 3/30/2019 2:32:00 PM A wonderful poem with a sadness that tugs at my heart strings. You captivate us Vijay, with such a vivid imagination! Great write dear friend. Poetry hugs, Jenny. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 5/26/2019 7:48:00 AM Much appreciate Jennifer..many thanks.

Allen Beilschmidt Sr. Date: 3/25/2019 4:49:00 PM Sad but great imagery Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/26/2019 9:24:00 AM Thank you Allen..much appreciate.

Paul Callus Date: 3/19/2019 4:58:00 PM Metaphorically captivating, touching...a sad loss mixed with longing, Vijay. Full marks to you. Regards // paul Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/26/2019 9:23:00 AM Thank you Paul..much appreciate. Regards.

CayCay Jennings Date: 3/17/2019 1:30:00 AM This has me awed in the best possible poetic way and sorting thru my own emotions to see which have just been pulled into various longings and melancholy by your poem. Beautiful work. Poetry hugs ... CayCay Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/17/2019 7:17:00 AM I am happy to read your generous feedback CayCay..many thanks for your cheerful presence on poetry soup.

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 3/16/2019 3:31:00 PM When the oldest tree has fallen and the lone bird flies away, there is a sadness in seeing the land stripped of life. Searching for a lost love in this type of barren area would make for a lonely climb. Perhaps she left as habitat was diminished, but the longing comes through very well, Vijay. Excellent writing! Congrats on your win in Brian's contest. Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/17/2019 7:16:00 AM Appreciate that you took the time to write detailed comments..many thanks for the kind remarks, Carolyn.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/15/2019 6:43:00 PM I see it is a win. So glad for that. Congratulations Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/17/2019 7:15:00 AM Thank you for the return visit, Andrea.

Silent One Date: 3/10/2019 6:45:00 PM You know i love a poem.about lost love... This is a fitting poem on the theme... Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/17/2019 7:14:00 AM Thank you SO.

Judy Ball Date: 3/10/2019 10:03:00 AM A very poignant piece Vijay. Sounds like two young lovers who were separated by some calamity. Now though he searches for her he will never find her again. Sad. God Bless, JB Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/17/2019 7:14:00 AM Your analysis is on mark..many thanks Judy..much appreciate your visit and comments.

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh Date: 3/9/2019 4:22:00 AM Beautiful ! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/9/2019 3:01:00 PM Thank you Akham.

Supraja Kannan Date: 3/9/2019 3:35:00 AM Such an emotional write, Vijay. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/9/2019 3:01:00 PM Thank you Supraja.

Brandy Nicole Date: 3/8/2019 9:39:00 PM Congratulations Vijay, on this win. Your thoughts always touch my heart in some way. ~ Brandy Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/9/2019 3:01:00 PM Thank you Brandy.

Pashang Salehi Date: 3/8/2019 8:03:00 PM The vacant sound in the shadows of the wind... the solitude ... Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/9/2019 3:01:00 PM Thank you Pashang.

Nette Onclaud Date: 3/8/2019 5:24:00 PM have a greeat saturday, vijay!..huggs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/9/2019 3:02:00 PM Thank you Nette.

M. L. Kiser Date: 3/8/2019 10:13:00 AM Lonely, sad yet, a moment expressed beautifully.pwh Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/8/2019 1:08:00 PM Thank you MLK..appreciate your visit and comments.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/7/2019 6:49:00 PM You are welcome, replying to your reply!! and waiting for your next poem Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/8/2019 1:08:00 PM Thank you Andrea. Coming soon.

Janice Canerdy Date: 3/7/2019 4:10:00 PM Vijay, this beautiful poem has a bittersweet tone. It parallels devastation in nature with that of the heart. Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/8/2019 1:07:00 PM Thank you Janice..appreciate your kind remarks.

Sara Kendrick Date: 3/7/2019 9:52:00 AM Very expressive and emotive work. I enjoyed reading even though a sad feel to the lines. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/8/2019 1:07:00 PM Thank you Sara..appreciate your visit and comments.

Joseph May Date: 3/6/2019 8:00:00 AM A poignant write Vijay..Well penned.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/6/2019 11:39:00 AM Thank you Joseph..much appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Brandy Nicole Date: 3/5/2019 8:02:00 PM "She never returned this way" This leaves an emptiness within. Many moments and emotions tangle through this. Your thoughts truly move me. ~ Brandy Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/6/2019 11:38:00 AM Nothing but emptiness for the man. Much appreciate your kind feedback, as always..many many thanks, Brandy.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/5/2019 6:03:00 PM Vijay, I love this poem. FAVE Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/6/2019 11:37:00 AM So special to receive a FAVE from you..such an honor coming from you. Much appreciate your kind support. many thanks, Andrea.

Harry Horsman Date: 3/5/2019 3:39:00 PM Reminds me of the pictures on the news here of the tornado in the U.S...If so it is so fitting, and wonderful poetry. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/6/2019 11:36:00 AM No not about the recent events..but the theme is heartbreak. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Harry. Many thanks.

Nette Onclaud Date: 3/5/2019 3:01:00 PM ohh, you raise the bar by waxing sentimental, vijay... lovely content and mood; love rules no matter the consequence..huggs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/6/2019 11:35:00 AM Yes--love rules..many thanks for the kind feedback, Nette.

Heidi Sands Date: 3/5/2019 11:19:00 AM Wow, a beautifully written poem and stirs emotions too. I love it :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/6/2019 11:33:00 AM So kind of you Heidi..much appreciate, as always..many many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp Date: 3/5/2019 9:09:00 AM Beautifully written, Vijay, such a well crafted poem. Excellent. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 3/6/2019 11:32:00 AM That is so special..coming from you my friend..much appreciate your kindness...many many thanks. Lawrence Sharp Date: 3/5/2019 12:30:00 PM I had to come back for another look... this is one of the best poems you've written, my friend.

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