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Echoing Vacant Sound

Rising above the destitute land Barren are the quiet hills now Echoing terrain's vacant sound There, where sweet home was. Tree uprooted quivers gently Its scattered mangled remains Swaying aches of forsaken pain Mourning tranquility's death. In solitude this climb he treks Aspiring zest of rising dawns As they concede to sullen days Looking for her presence Ever since the oldest tree fell And the lone bird fled its nest. The sunrise still evokes her name, So does her beloved sunset. Despite the dearest hopes he held She never returned this way. March 5, 2019 Placed first: Standard contest #190 by Brian Strand

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 5/26/2019 3:43:00 AM

Echoes of a vacant sound ...that is a magical metaphor. Thank you, Kai

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/26/2019 7:48:00 AM

Much appreciate Kai..many thanks.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/30/2019 2:32:00 PM

A wonderful poem with a sadness that tugs at my heart strings. You captivate us Vijay, with such a vivid imagination! Great write dear friend. Poetry hugs, Jenny.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/26/2019 7:48:00 AM

Much appreciate Jennifer..many thanks.

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.

Date: 3/25/2019 4:49:00 PM

Sad but great imagery

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/26/2019 9:24:00 AM

Thank you Allen..much appreciate.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/19/2019 4:58:00 PM

Metaphorically captivating, touching...a sad loss mixed with longing, Vijay. Full marks to you. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/26/2019 9:23:00 AM

Thank you Paul..much appreciate. Regards.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/17/2019 1:30:00 AM

This has me awed in the best possible poetic way and sorting thru my own emotions to see which have just been pulled into various longings and melancholy by your poem. Beautiful work. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/17/2019 7:17:00 AM

I am happy to read your generous feedback CayCay..many thanks for your cheerful presence on poetry soup.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/16/2019 3:31:00 PM

When the oldest tree has fallen and the lone bird flies away, there is a sadness in seeing the land stripped of life. Searching for a lost love in this type of barren area would make for a lonely climb. Perhaps she left as habitat was diminished, but the longing comes through very well, Vijay. Excellent writing! Congrats on your win in Brian's contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/17/2019 7:16:00 AM

Appreciate that you took the time to write detailed comments..many thanks for the kind remarks, Carolyn.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/15/2019 6:43:00 PM

I see it is a win. So glad for that. Congratulations

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/17/2019 7:15:00 AM

Thank you for the return visit, Andrea.

Silent One

Date: 3/10/2019 6:45:00 PM

You know i love a poem.about lost love... This is a fitting poem on the theme...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/17/2019 7:14:00 AM

Thank you SO.

Judy Ball

Date: 3/10/2019 10:03:00 AM

A very poignant piece Vijay. Sounds like two young lovers who were separated by some calamity. Now though he searches for her he will never find her again. Sad. God Bless, JB

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/17/2019 7:14:00 AM

Your analysis is on mark..many thanks Judy..much appreciate your visit and comments.

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh

Date: 3/9/2019 4:22:00 AM

Beautiful !

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/9/2019 3:01:00 PM

Thank you Akham.

Supraja Kannan

Date: 3/9/2019 3:35:00 AM

Such an emotional write, Vijay. Congratulations on your well deserved win.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/9/2019 3:01:00 PM

Thank you Supraja.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 3/8/2019 9:39:00 PM

Congratulations Vijay, on this win. Your thoughts always touch my heart in some way. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/9/2019 3:01:00 PM

Thank you Brandy.

Pashang Salehi

Date: 3/8/2019 8:03:00 PM

The vacant sound in the shadows of the wind... the solitude ...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/9/2019 3:01:00 PM

Thank you Pashang.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/8/2019 5:24:00 PM

have a greeat saturday, vijay!..huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/9/2019 3:02:00 PM

Thank you Nette.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 3/8/2019 10:13:00 AM

Lonely, sad yet, a moment expressed beautifully.pwh

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/8/2019 1:08:00 PM

Thank you MLK..appreciate your visit and comments.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2019 6:49:00 PM

You are welcome, replying to your reply!! and waiting for your next poem

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/8/2019 1:08:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. Coming soon.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/7/2019 4:10:00 PM

Vijay, this beautiful poem has a bittersweet tone. It parallels devastation in nature with that of the heart. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/8/2019 1:07:00 PM

Thank you Janice..appreciate your kind remarks.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/7/2019 9:52:00 AM

Very expressive and emotive work. I enjoyed reading even though a sad feel to the lines. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/8/2019 1:07:00 PM

Thank you Sara..appreciate your visit and comments.

Joseph May

Date: 3/6/2019 8:00:00 AM

A poignant write Vijay..Well penned..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2019 11:39:00 AM

Thank you Joseph..much appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 3/5/2019 8:02:00 PM

"She never returned this way" This leaves an emptiness within. Many moments and emotions tangle through this. Your thoughts truly move me. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2019 11:38:00 AM

Nothing but emptiness for the man. Much appreciate your kind feedback, as always..many many thanks, Brandy.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/5/2019 6:03:00 PM

Vijay, I love this poem. FAVE

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2019 11:37:00 AM

So special to receive a FAVE from you..such an honor coming from you. Much appreciate your kind support. many thanks, Andrea.

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/5/2019 3:39:00 PM

Reminds me of the pictures on the news here of the tornado in the U.S...If so it is so fitting, and wonderful poetry.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2019 11:36:00 AM

No not about the recent events..but the theme is heartbreak. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Harry. Many thanks.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/5/2019 3:01:00 PM

ohh, you raise the bar by waxing sentimental, vijay... lovely content and mood; love rules no matter the consequence..huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2019 11:35:00 AM

Yes--love rules..many thanks for the kind feedback, Nette.

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/5/2019 11:19:00 AM

Wow, a beautifully written poem and stirs emotions too. I love it :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2019 11:33:00 AM

So kind of you Heidi..much appreciate, as always..many many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 3/5/2019 9:09:00 AM

Beautifully written, Vijay, such a well crafted poem. Excellent.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2019 11:32:00 AM

That is so special..coming from you my friend..much appreciate your kindness...many many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp
Date: 3/5/2019 12:30:00 PM

I had to come back for another look... this is one of the best poems you've written, my friend.