Vijay Pandit Poet Verse

Echoing Vacant Sound

Rising above the destitute land
Barren are the quiet hills now
Echoing terrain's vacant sound
There, where sweet home was.

Tree uprooted quivers gently
Its scattered mangled remains
Swaying aches of forsaken pain
Mourning tranquility's death. 

In solitude this climb he treks 
Aspiring zest of rising dawns
As they concede to sullen days
Looking for her presence
Ever since the oldest tree fell
And the lone bird fled its nest.

The sunrise still evokes her name,
So does her beloved sunset.

Despite the dearest hopes he held 
She never returned this way.

March 5, 2019
Placed first: Standard contest #190 by Brian Strand

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Kai Michael Neumann May 26, 2019 at 3:43 AM Echoes of a vacant sound ...that is a magical metaphor. Thank you, Kai Vijay Pandit May 26, 2019 at 7:48 AM Much appreciate Kai..many thanks.

Jennifer Proxenos March 30, 2019 at 2:32 PM A wonderful poem with a sadness that tugs at my heart strings. You captivate us Vijay, with such a vivid imagination! Great write dear friend. Poetry hugs, Jenny. Vijay Pandit May 26, 2019 at 7:48 AM Much appreciate Jennifer..many thanks.

Allen Beilschmidt Sr. March 25, 2019 at 4:49 PM Sad but great imagery Vijay Pandit March 26, 2019 at 9:24 AM Thank you Allen..much appreciate.

Paul Callus March 19, 2019 at 4:58 PM Metaphorically captivating, touching...a sad loss mixed with longing, Vijay. Full marks to you. Regards // paul Vijay Pandit March 26, 2019 at 9:23 AM Thank you Paul..much appreciate. Regards.

CayCay Godwin March 17, 2019 at 1:30 AM This has me awed in the best possible poetic way and sorting thru my own emotions to see which have just been pulled into various longings and melancholy by your poem. Beautiful work. Poetry hugs ... CayCay Vijay Pandit March 17, 2019 at 7:17 AM I am happy to read your generous feedback CayCay..many thanks for your cheerful presence on poetry soup.

Carolyn Devonshire March 16, 2019 at 3:31 PM When the oldest tree has fallen and the lone bird flies away, there is a sadness in seeing the land stripped of life. Searching for a lost love in this type of barren area would make for a lonely climb. Perhaps she left as habitat was diminished, but the longing comes through very well, Vijay. Excellent writing! Congrats on your win in Brian's contest. Hugs, Carolyn Vijay Pandit March 17, 2019 at 7:16 AM Appreciate that you took the time to write detailed comments..many thanks for the kind remarks, Carolyn.

Andrea Dietrich March 15, 2019 at 6:43 PM I see it is a win. So glad for that. Congratulations Vijay Pandit March 17, 2019 at 7:15 AM Thank you for the return visit, Andrea.

Silent One March 10, 2019 at 6:45 PM You know i love a poem.about lost love... This is a fitting poem on the theme... Vijay Pandit March 17, 2019 at 7:14 AM Thank you SO.

Judy Ball March 10, 2019 at 10:03 AM A very poignant piece Vijay. Sounds like two young lovers who were separated by some calamity. Now though he searches for her he will never find her again. Sad. God Bless, JB Vijay Pandit March 17, 2019 at 7:14 AM Your analysis is on mark..many thanks Judy..much appreciate your visit and comments.

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh March 9, 2019 at 4:22 AM Beautiful ! Vijay Pandit March 9, 2019 at 3:01 PM Thank you Akham.

Supraja Kannan March 9, 2019 at 3:35 AM Such an emotional write, Vijay. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Vijay Pandit March 9, 2019 at 3:01 PM Thank you Supraja.

Brandy Nicole March 8, 2019 at 9:39 PM Congratulations Vijay, on this win. Your thoughts always touch my heart in some way. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit March 9, 2019 at 3:01 PM Thank you Brandy.

Pashang Salehi March 8, 2019 at 8:03 PM The vacant sound in the shadows of the wind... the solitude ... Vijay Pandit March 9, 2019 at 3:01 PM Thank you Pashang.

Nette Onclaud March 8, 2019 at 5:24 PM have a greeat saturday, vijay!..huggs Vijay Pandit March 9, 2019 at 3:02 PM Thank you Nette.

M. L. Kiser March 8, 2019 at 10:13 AM Lonely, sad yet, a moment expressed beautifully.pwh Vijay Pandit March 8, 2019 at 1:08 PM Thank you MLK..appreciate your visit and comments.

Andrea Dietrich March 7, 2019 at 6:49 PM You are welcome, replying to your reply!! and waiting for your next poem Vijay Pandit March 8, 2019 at 1:08 PM Thank you Andrea. Coming soon.

Janice Canerdy March 7, 2019 at 4:10 PM Vijay, this beautiful poem has a bittersweet tone. It parallels devastation in nature with that of the heart. Janice Vijay Pandit March 8, 2019 at 1:07 PM Thank you Janice..appreciate your kind remarks.

Sara Kendrick March 7, 2019 at 9:52 AM Very expressive and emotive work. I enjoyed reading even though a sad feel to the lines. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara Vijay Pandit March 8, 2019 at 1:07 PM Thank you Sara..appreciate your visit and comments.

Joseph May March 6, 2019 at 8:00 AM A poignant write Vijay..Well penned.. Vijay Pandit March 6, 2019 at 11:39 AM Thank you Joseph..much appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Brandy Nicole March 5, 2019 at 8:02 PM "She never returned this way" This leaves an emptiness within. Many moments and emotions tangle through this. Your thoughts truly move me. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit March 6, 2019 at 11:38 AM Nothing but emptiness for the man. Much appreciate your kind feedback, as always..many many thanks, Brandy.

Andrea Dietrich March 5, 2019 at 6:03 PM Vijay, I love this poem. FAVE Vijay Pandit March 6, 2019 at 11:37 AM So special to receive a FAVE from you..such an honor coming from you. Much appreciate your kind support. many thanks, Andrea.

Harry Horsman March 5, 2019 at 3:39 PM Reminds me of the pictures on the news here of the tornado in the U.S...If so it is so fitting, and wonderful poetry. Vijay Pandit March 6, 2019 at 11:36 AM No not about the recent events..but the theme is heartbreak. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Harry. Many thanks.

Nette Onclaud March 5, 2019 at 3:01 PM ohh, you raise the bar by waxing sentimental, vijay... lovely content and mood; love rules no matter the consequence..huggs Vijay Pandit March 6, 2019 at 11:35 AM Yes--love rules..many thanks for the kind feedback, Nette.

Heidi Sands March 5, 2019 at 11:19 AM Wow, a beautifully written poem and stirs emotions too. I love it :) Vijay Pandit March 6, 2019 at 11:33 AM So kind of you Heidi..much appreciate, as always..many many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp March 5, 2019 at 9:09 AM Beautifully written, Vijay, such a well crafted poem. Excellent. Vijay Pandit March 6, 2019 at 11:32 AM That is so special..coming from you my friend..much appreciate your kindness...many many thanks. Lawrence Sharp March 5, 2019 at 12:30 PM I had to come back for another look... this is one of the best poems you've written, my friend.

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