Nette Onclaud Poet Haiku

Early Spring Rain

early spring rain

       pelts a cherry tree...

           dousing young blossoms



colored rainbow...

       sparks petals' hues

       
          with fragrant mist




Debbie Guzzi's Spring Contest
by nette onclaud ( revised)

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Dr.Ram Mehta May 16, 2014 at 9:11 PM Great haiku. Congratulations on the win, nette

Debbie Guzzi May 16, 2014 at 8:20 PM Those juxtaposed lines are the hardest! I spent so long just describing & my teacher would say "How is that a surprise or a revelation?" Of course I'd grumble! Congrad's on your win and trying so hard Light & love

Harry Horsman May 16, 2014 at 5:42 PM love these nette, the visual aspect is amazing....

Kelly Deschler May 16, 2014 at 12:58 PM There is nothing more refreshing that the scent of spring rain, flower petals, and fresh air. You have so much beauty in just six short lines. An amazing poem, Nette! Good luck in Debbie's contest!

Linda Jackson May 16, 2014 at 7:51 AM Love the imagery. Congratulations. Linda x

Lori Lucas Mcclure May 16, 2014 at 7:48 AM Awesome Haiku! Congratulations on your win! Lori

Andrea Dietrich May 15, 2014 at 9:20 PM these are so pretty. Big Congrats, Nette.

Carrie Richards May 14, 2014 at 1:18 PM "flavored mist"............ such a incredible description....... so often I wish I had thought to use what I read in your poems !

Aiyah Torres May 14, 2014 at 12:19 PM great write... I so love the rainbow in early spring rain... :O))

Monterey Sirak May 14, 2014 at 6:18 AM Lovely! I love the fresh spring rains.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser May 14, 2014 at 5:32 AM wow Nette!!! can i bee under the first stanza.. :) love it.. :), GBU, olive

Leon Datu May 13, 2014 at 10:32 PM A soothing spring moment with a nicely-done pivot. Nette, thanks a lot for selecting my sijo in your contest! Soup mail.