Dusk

the sky is like a canvas
splashed with modern art
multi coloured daubs of clouds
streaks of blue apart
a reddish splodge sun
slowly slides towards the edge
and dusk has begun

Jack Horne, 29th September, for Nette’s WONDER OF DUSK IN SEGUIDILLA contest
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Anderson-Throop Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 3:00 AM
My favorite time of day.... Imaginative word choice. Visual and visceral. You should have been up with the winners...but then I have always been an odd duck...never agree with consensus! Thanks for letting the rest of us enjoy!
Poet Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 12:18 PM
Well jack I feel this should have been placed in the contest.A beauty from you!
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 5, 2012 at 4:49 AM
Jack, Your poetry is always so diverse. I enjoyed this entry that should do well in the contest. I have to mention how impressed I was when I read your page in the "Snippets Anthology" I just received today. I loved both your poems, in fact they may be my two favorite in the entire book! It was such a pleasure to recognise so many names in the book. You have such great talent. Cheers!
Horsman Avatar
October 4, 2012 at 3:37 PM
This is lovely Jack, almost an opposite, impression, usually it the sky on the canvas, you've done it the other way round, awesome to read this poem, like you have written it.....
Sweetheart Avatar
October 4, 2012 at 7:36 AM
VIVIDLY WRITTEN WITH IMPRESSIVE LINES DEPICTING DUSK .. WINNING WISHES jACK LUV ..
Culverhouse Avatar
October 4, 2012 at 6:53 AM
what in the world is seguidilla I will have to look that one up....I am getting an education today. beautiful poetry today! Thanks for taking me on the sunset stroll! lol
Dietrich Avatar
October 1, 2012 at 4:24 PM
yours is wonderfully descriptive, Jack. I've been here almost 3 hours and still can't finish. haha. what is splodge ? that one is new word for me.
Andresen Avatar
October 1, 2012 at 2:46 PM
Jack, this is lovely. Good luck in the contest, hoping it will win. oxox love Anne-Lise :)
Grisetti Avatar
September 30, 2012 at 6:07 PM
Remarkable use of words inthis new form. Nette should love it as well.
Sivey Avatar
September 29, 2012 at 4:29 PM
What a spectacular write my friend! I thoroughly enjoyed every speck of sunlight you gave through this poem! The imagery you gave me were spot on for a great description of dusk! Fabulous piece, Awesome Work!!
O'Leary Avatar
September 29, 2012 at 2:00 PM
Very nice imagery! Good luck in the contest... Terry
Ellison Avatar
September 29, 2012 at 1:44 PM
A great write my friend! Had to look up "splodge" though! LOL Cheers, Jack
Kendrick Avatar
September 29, 2012 at 1:25 PM
Very expressive and descriptive work..I could just see that painting..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..That canvas of modern art is definitely geometrical design with rainbow colors...Thanks for dropping by..Sara
Williams Avatar
September 29, 2012 at 1:00 PM
Jack, a very nice picture you have painted here, I love the idea of dusk being depicted as modern art, well done and good luck, I am slowly (very slowly) getting back into things, and I would like to thank you dearly for the card from you and Susan it meant a lot to me, take care my friend...David
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