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Continuation of my dreamtime series, written upon waking from vivid dreaming...

Dreamtime: 29 Fathoms

I landed on the bottom of the deepest lake on earth
My will to live had escaped me
Eyes wide shut, tho my spirit remained
Confused in death, much as in life
Green specs of membrous memories floated under my eyelids
Happy thoughts- skipping flat, smooth, dolomite discs
Into Lake Superior, screaming "watch me, watch me"
To mom & dad vigilant on the picnic bench above me
Nodding their heads
Eliciting roars of approval at 7-8-9 skips
Before losing speed, distance and the will to go on
Letting go, travelling to some distant universe
Where another can hold such wonder in their hands

Where another

      Can hold such wonder

                                In their hands


11/29/18

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Jack Horne

January 29, 2019 at 4:14 PM

wow, I'm glad I can never recall my dreams! Loved the powerful way you described it

James Marshall Goff

January 29, 2019 at 5:15 PM

Thanks Jack!

Sara Kendrick

January 13, 2019 at 6:54 AM

Scary dream. Enjoyed reading your dream life. Sara

James Marshall Goff

January 13, 2019 at 7:01 AM

Holy Cow, Sara! Yes! as many do...I try to go to bed peaceful to prevent such! but often resolve deep subliminal messages like above! accurate review! glad you enjoyed!

CayCay Godwin

January 6, 2019 at 4:04 PM

Wow, I just noticed Nette's comment! Do think it is an accident that the universe lead 2 people to share a same response with you concerning your writing?

James Marshall Goff

January 6, 2019 at 4:17 PM

Thanks again CayCay! would love a larger audience! need to borrow a 'round-to-it!

CayCay Godwin

January 6, 2019 at 4:02 PM

Wow, this is loaded with dramatic emotional upheavals on a non-stop basis capable of making a heart race. Your descriptive capabilities make me think you should write a book based on all your 'spills' combined into one. I do believe their is an audience for your talent. All the best .. CayCay

James Marshall Goff

January 6, 2019 at 4:15 PM

Thank you, CayCay...I try to relate images to the readers that get inside my mind & all its frailities, always, with a release ending!

Nette Onclaud

January 5, 2019 at 11:43 AM

and why not publish an anthology on dreams, jimbo?... may our friendship continue this 2019...keep on going!...huggs

James Marshall Goff

January 5, 2019 at 12:36 PM

Good idea, Nette! Thank you!

Vladislav Raven

December 23, 2018 at 6:01 AM

Hi James, I love the content on this piece. I was totally caught up within this write. From beginning to end, I was lost within the realism of the imagery your words did paint. An engaging, powerful piece James. Have a wonderful Sunday. Your friend always....Mike. Wishing you and yours a very Merry Christmas James. Hope you find all you wish in 2019.

James Marshall Goff

January 5, 2019 at 12:36 PM

Thanks Mike!

Carolyn Devonshire

December 20, 2018 at 1:44 PM

Enjoyed the way your spirit lived on, even after reaching the greatest depths. There is a lesson we can learn here, Jim. Want to thank you for the card. Hope you have a great holiday season with your family. Hugs for you and your mom, Carolyn

James Marshall Goff

December 20, 2018 at 1:48 PM

Thank you for your holiday greetings as well, Carolyn! Mom is fragile but in good spirits! will say hi!