Drams of Gold
Jupiter and earth spoke of Lunar and Nova
were they wished to meet in the sky
to be lover before a world of worshipers
The Sun and Moon make love and discreetly
hide themselves in darkness.
The Celestial body over shadowing the Other
Caliphate ibn Yosef spoke of the Sky as
an event where worshippers
wonder and marvel
at the spectacle. Happy to hear the filtered version of
the song. It had all aspects to make it's sequence easiest to follow.
The middle complicated the beginning due to the way the character had been raised. The end complicated the beginning where what we thought was, was and in it's complication confused the entire plot . It bothered me to hear the women would refuse to even ask past what troubled them
There interest into others
confused the emotions and it cause separation as it was hardest to understand.
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