Paul Callus Poet Rhyme

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Downpour

She sits with heavy heart
Watching the rain
Pouring relentlessly
As feelings flow
Warm tears run down her face
Easing the pain
Until the deluge stops
And street lights glow!

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Paul Callus ~ 18th Aug 2015
Contest: Visual of a Verso
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud
Placed 4th

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Beautiful Scars October 13, 2015 at 2:42 PM Wonderfully written, congrats on your win :) -LU Paul Callus October 13, 2015 at 5:00 PM Thank you Laura! It's a pleasure to have another lovely visit from you today:) ~ Regards // paul

Kelly Deschler September 7, 2015 at 11:57 PM So nice to read this beautiful write again, this time as a winner! Congratulations to you as well, Paul! Paul Callus September 8, 2015 at 4:54 PM Thank you for a repeat visit and the congrats, Kelly:) ~ All the best. // paul

Skat A September 1, 2015 at 11:45 PM Paul, Congratulations on your win.... SKAT Paul Callus September 2, 2015 at 10:37 AM Thank you Skat. Will pay you a visit soon:) // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 30, 2015 at 11:19 PM Very wonderful verse Paul! Freely flowing painful emotions!Congrats on awesome win! Paul Callus August 31, 2015 at 4:16 PM Thank you Upma. It's lovely to have you stopping by. All the best. // paul

Jan Allison August 30, 2015 at 6:14 AM Dropping back with my congratulations Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx Paul Callus August 31, 2015 at 4:24 PM Or better still....leave everything and join us!:)) hugs // paul Jan Allison August 31, 2015 at 4:22 PM Oh have a wonderful time ... I'm house clearing - want to swap! Hugs jan xx Paul Callus August 31, 2015 at 4:18 PM Thank you, Jan:) ~ Having an early night....waking up early tomorrow, going to spend a day in Gozo. Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 30, 2015 at 1:42 AM Paul, love that you connected the two pictures together.. sad but then there you give the lights...........---hope.... hugs and hugs!! thanks much! Yes I enjoyed the holidays mumuuuch!~Olive Eloisa =') Paul Callus August 31, 2015 at 4:23 PM Thank you Olive_eloi....you read it well:) Hope is always the last thing to die!! Glad your vacation was lovely and more....:) Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich August 29, 2015 at 10:26 PM You predicted right (on my comment below) BIG congrats as you are among the many beautifully inspired poems. Paul Callus August 31, 2015 at 4:20 PM Thank you Andrea; ... and one of those inspired winning poems happens to be yours:) // paul

Laura Hay August 23, 2015 at 2:22 AM A good downpour can wash away your tears and refresh your soul. Its usually when the rain stops that you notice the change in mind too. Very well done Paul. Warm regards, Laura. Paul Callus August 23, 2015 at 10:37 AM I like your reasoning, Laura! Thank you for reading and commenting. All the best. // paul

Kp Nunez August 22, 2015 at 11:32 AM I like that though it started on a sad note, some kind of glad hope is implied towards the end. All the best in the contest, Paul! hugs! Paul Callus August 22, 2015 at 2:05 PM Whenever possible I like leaving the door open for bright solutions. Thank you Kim for reading:) Enjoy your weekend. hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich August 22, 2015 at 10:54 AM You did this one very nicely! and a great connection with the second picture! Paul Callus August 22, 2015 at 2:01 PM Thank you, Andrea. These two pictures combined offer a lot of inspiration. I predict a good number of lovely entries. // paul

Kelly Deschler August 21, 2015 at 10:17 PM Any kind of light will always bring comfort to the darker days... An emotional and beautiful interpretation of these two images. Nicely penned, Paul! Good luck to you! Paul Callus August 22, 2015 at 3:43 AM Thank you for the lovely feedback, Kelly! Glad you liked it...I was carried away by your entry! ~ Have a nice weekend. // paul

Robert Lindley August 21, 2015 at 9:03 PM Sweet,smooth and so lovely! Masterful execution of so much in a short piece! A7 Paul Callus August 22, 2015 at 3:44 AM Thank you for your generous comments, Robert, and the high rating:) All the best my friend. // paul

Afolabi Muideen August 20, 2015 at 6:38 PM What a sad touched piece, your penned this a great, excellence. Good luck in the contest..........A.M. Paul Callus August 21, 2015 at 1:53 PM Yes, it is sad, Afolabi, but at the end there is a gleam of hope! Thank you for reading. // paul

Charmaine Chircop August 19, 2015 at 6:35 PM Such a beautiful poem this is , sad but beautiful. Tears do ease the pain, and the streets light glow brings comfort in the dark ,and warmth after the rain. Lovely! Paul Callus August 20, 2015 at 2:56 PM Thank you for the insightful feedback, Charm! You always manage to get to the heart of the poem. Glad that you enjoyed. All the best. // paul

Sara Kendrick August 19, 2015 at 3:17 PM Enjoyed reading this one though its tone is sorrowful..Sara Paul Callus August 19, 2015 at 3:57 PM Strange how often we find beauty in sadness, Sara! Thank you for reading and liking:) All the best. // paul

Jack Horne August 19, 2015 at 3:06 PM love this, Paul. works so well with the rain theme. hope you are well and having a good week Paul Callus August 19, 2015 at 4:09 PM Thank you for stopping by Jack. I expect to see similar entries to mine...those pictures inspire these types of feelings. Take care. // paul

Tim Smith August 19, 2015 at 2:23 PM Wow Paul what a terrific little verse....a perfect ending Paul Callus August 19, 2015 at 4:05 PM Glad you found this to your liking, Tim:) Thank you! // paul

Pandita Sietesantos August 18, 2015 at 10:47 PM While melancholy, this piece shines with beauty! We wait with her so that she may find new hope for love after the rain abates. I love this masterfully woven piece, Paul! For me this is a big winner and a 7! Good luck in the contest, my friend! Pandita Paul Callus August 19, 2015 at 3:41 PM Many thanks, Pandita; moved by your lovely feedback, and for the faith you show in this entry:) Always a pleasure to have you visiting. ~ paul

Alexis Y. August 18, 2015 at 6:40 PM Paul , l sensed the profound heartache in this write. Great job! Good luck in the contest:-) Alexis 7 Paul Callus August 19, 2015 at 3:19 PM Thank you Alexis! I'm glad that you felt some emotion oozing out of my write:) All the best. // paul

Jadazzle United August 18, 2015 at 5:35 PM oh Paul this is wonderful I only have dark sad thoughts when i see these images so need to lighten up :-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx Jan Allison August 18, 2015 at 6:14 PM I'm hoping Darren will be active on jadazzle in the future ... but until then I will hold the fort - his continued recovery is the most important thing to me:-) hugs jan xxx Paul Callus August 18, 2015 at 5:41 PM Thank you Jan! Yes, these images transmit sad, dark feelings, but I tried to change them into a positive ending. ~ Lovely to see Jadazzle in action again:) Hugs // paul