Down a Storm Drain Gone Forever

DOWN A STORM DRAIN GONE FOREVER.

There was once a wicked, jealous old human,
Who lived in a house down the lane, 
Not far from us,
Ugly and mean sounding, couldn’t tell
If man or woman,
Was narky to the neighborhoods children, 
Including me,
We discovered this human was woman with 
One large bosom!
She lived on her own, no children or husband, 
Or even a pet,
She always wore the same apron, her hands always
Hidden in this grubby apron, 
My friends decided on a bet,
That she had a gun and would should shoot,
Us all dead
Why else would she always keep her hands 
In her apron we said!
We could never have guessed the truth 
About this apron.
One day we saw two young girls laughing at her
She was furious, fiddled in her apron 
And immediately, 
Upon doing this, the girls fell, and each 
Broke a leg!
We couldn’t believe what we had seen, I noticed a
Hairpin on the path, going back, very sharp,
And then another and another, 
Each one, a different color.
Obviously someone was throwing the 
Used pins away,
In a very careless way!
I have to find out what is in her apron pocket,
I said to my friends, so early the next day,
We all met
Behind her house, I was chosen to be 
The pickpocket,
So I crept along the bushes outside her house
Waiting for her to have her afternoon snooze, 
I saw a locket around her neck which was open
And from it peeped bright colored 
Hairpins, she was asleep, 
With one eye open, I thought I could see
Her eye socket!
Terrified I stretched out my hand, put it gently
Into her apron pocket,
And pulled out a tattered faceless little doll,
Home made from potato sackcloth,
A voodoo doll, screamed James,
He was certainly not wrong for he played
A great deal of TV horror games!
She obviously pricked the voodoo doll 
With colored pins,	
Every time someone annoyed her, she would one
Day pay for her sins!
As quickly as we could we ran to the nearest drain
Down the street and dropped it in, it fell silently
And disappeared, gone forever, 
That woman was not sane!
The next day early we walked towards her house,
The house was empty and the horrid old witch gone,
We breathed a sigh of relief as we watched
A new morning dawn!

Contest: Down a storm drain, gone forever,
Sponsor: Eve Roper 
Date entered: 2019/03/02
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Allison Avatar
March 22, 2019 at 8:38 PM
dropping back with my congrats jennifer:-) hugs Jan xx
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March 23, 2019 at 1:48 AM
Thanks Jan - will be visiting you shortly - very well done with a deserved win. Poetry hugs, Jennifer
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March 22, 2019 at 4:48 PM
Jennifer, thank you for entering my contest. You had clear and fascinating imagery and great rhythm and flow..Congratulations on your 4th place win. . Come and visit me on my blog https://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry/blogs/blog_detail.aspx?BlogID=35331&PoetID=57242
Proxenos Avatar
March 23, 2019 at 2:00 AM
Hi my lovely friend, Thank you - i really enjoyed this contest - I think my thoughts go rampant when I see a blank page on the computer and my key board beckoning me! I think that would make a good poem, have just given myself an idea, and I will certainly be visiting your blog. love and poetry hugs, Jenny.
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March 12, 2019 at 2:36 AM
G'day Jennifer … wow, you certainly had a very interesting childhood with an interesting but scary neighbour. Very good and entertaining Jennifer - Lindsay
Proxenos Avatar
March 12, 2019 at 4:56 AM
Hi Lindsay, yes we had a secret detectives club, and had lots of fun and scares, some is real, some is fiction but the faceless doll part is true! Glad it entertained you Lindsay. Poetry hugs, Jennifer
Kiser Avatar
March 8, 2019 at 10:21 AM
Whew! That was intense! Great story but, I was on the edge of my seat thinking that you'd get caught and she'd jab those pins into you.
Proxenos Avatar
March 9, 2019 at 12:22 AM
Hi MLK - so wonderful to see your comment and name on my page. So I had you sitting on the edge of your seat - what can I say - sorry, but not sorry, for the story must had had an impact on you! So great to have you visit! Poetry hugs galore, Jennifer.
Dietrich Avatar
March 7, 2019 at 7:10 PM
wow, VERY creative, Jennifer. You turned it into quite an entertaining story!
Proxenos Avatar
March 8, 2019 at 7:53 AM
Thanks Andrea - imagine if what Paul commented below became true- scary! Lovely comment, Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
Callus Avatar
March 6, 2019 at 9:54 AM
Full marks to your ripe imagination, Jenny! I very much enjoyed this fast moving narration. I still wonder if that doll will ever turn up somewhere else, and fall in other wicked hands! ~ Warm regards // paul
Proxenos Avatar
March 6, 2019 at 2:00 PM
Imagine that happening - perhaps because as a child I was involved in this famous five adventure, it wants revenge on me! Thank-you so much Paul for a wonderful comment, be well. Poetry hugs, Jenny.
Onclaud Avatar
March 5, 2019 at 2:53 PM
your mastery at fantasy story-telling raises the roof, jen...remarkable piece from you... huggs
Proxenos Avatar
March 6, 2019 at 1:02 AM
Hi Nette, wow do I - that's great - i want to write short stories but in poem form - thank you Nette! Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
Godwin Avatar
March 4, 2019 at 6:51 PM
Your imagination soars with this wonderful plot! So relieved SHE didn't wake and that the Voodoo doll will do no more - a good ending. I was entertained throughout, Jenny! All the best ... CayCay (sent u a Soup message)
Proxenos Avatar
March 5, 2019 at 10:32 AM
Thanks CayCay you are special! Love that it entertained you through to the end. Love and hugs, Jenny.
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March 4, 2019 at 5:22 AM
- Woow ... awesome written ... a story that gives goose bumps, my soul sister :) - Best wishes in the contest ... I hope this will be a top win for you :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Proxenos Avatar
March 4, 2019 at 12:26 PM
Hi soul sister, what youngsters get up to, and yet, it was these same youngsters that got rid of this evil woman! Thank you for a lovely comment my friend. Poetry hugs, Jenny.
Lindley Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 4:40 PM
A scary tale, you are a wonderful story teller my great friend. This is beautiful talent on display. My son read this And thinks it is great as do I. A fav.. a beauty my friend.
Proxenos Avatar
March 4, 2019 at 12:30 PM
Hi Robert, thank-you for your wonderful comment - so pleased that you and your son enjoyed it - I am a story teller Robert, and I'm thinking of writing a book of stories for children. Thank-you my dear friend. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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March 3, 2019 at 2:30 PM
At the beginning, I thought you had met Lizzie Gale, who lived down the lane when I was a lad. Once again, I would encourage you to write books for children! Aloha! Rico
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 3:18 PM
Rico, I'm slowly coming to the realization that you have been right all along about me writing children's books but i'm thinking of writing stories in poetry form. Thank you Rico for believing I can do this, i promise if I do go ahead with this idea, the first book would be dedicated to you! Yasou, poetry hugs, Jennifer.
May Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 2:07 PM
A scary story, well told Jennifer..best wishes
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 3:21 PM
Hi Joseph thank you for your comment, just a bunch of 12 year old kids looking for adventure - they sure found it and got rid of this nasty old woman! Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
Horsman Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 5:56 AM
Oh, Yes, absolutely brilliant, better than pussy down the well...top marks for your story narration Jennifer.
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 9:21 AM
Hi Harry, thank-you for a lovely comment, means a lot coming from you - I love writing short stories and enjoy rhyming them, hence my poetry was born! Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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March 2, 2019 at 11:42 PM
You are a great story teller Jennifer :) You kept my senses captured all through :)
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 9:24 AM
So glad I captured your senses throughout the contest, i hoped that would happen when i wrote and then posted it! Thank you for a great comment Swetha. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
Cunningham Avatar
March 2, 2019 at 4:43 PM
A scary tale, well written ,good riddance to the wicked witch I say. Good luck Jennifer. Tom.
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 9:57 AM
Hi Tom, Well said, but at least she entered my imagination long enough for me to write a poem about her! I had a nightmare about her last night, but a dinosaur ate her. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 2, 2019 at 3:36 PM
Wow! A horrifying tale and one of bravery as well. The dawning of a new day. Excellent write!
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 9:47 AM
Brave, young and unaware of any ramifications - imagine if people like this do exist, but I presume they do! Thanks for a lovely comment Kim. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
Michael Avatar
March 2, 2019 at 11:17 AM
What a frightening lady... imagine if she had a gun...no one would be left around...All the best...
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 9:36 AM
I'm sure that these strange, frightening people do exit , a scary thought! Thanks Arturo, Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
Allison Avatar
March 2, 2019 at 11:15 AM
gosh what a scary story Jennifer! good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 9:32 AM
Hi Jan, But it had a happy ending! Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
One Avatar
March 2, 2019 at 10:54 AM
Damn, what an awful story.. You wrote it so well.. Good luck in the contest..
Proxenos Avatar
March 3, 2019 at 9:30 AM
Really an intended grim story with a happy ending - great that you think I wrote it well - thank you for the wishes. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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