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Disillusion Oh Me

Sorrow weeps, small happiness creeps
Remorse afloat, in my silk coat
Emptiness appears, silence leers
Fading shadow, far below
Begging forgiveness, lots of emptiness............
 
Cemented dreams, gone to extremes
Song of despair, not knowing I care
Tears grabbing, hands jabbing
Wisps of cries, light up the sky..............
 
Eyes pleading, heart bleeding
Passion is no more, try  to ignore
Breath held, try to expel
Life is gone, not so brawn............
 
Holding lifeless, so breathless
Sobs of redemption, seize upon preemption
Full fledged devastation, marks no exemption
Temptress aching, no remaking.......
 
The Disillusion Oh Me....

Brooke Dylan 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 5/15/2014 7:34:00 AM
Great style, great subject, great write. Sad feelings but you say it so well. kudoz
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Date: 5/14/2014 3:32:00 PM
Nicely written. I see you went for internal rhyme instead of end rhyme with these quatrains. It was very fun to read it though the topic is sad!
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Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/15/2014 5:22:00 PM
THANK YOU... Andrea... hugs
Date: 5/14/2014 9:10:00 AM
Interesting way of weaving all the imagery related to sadness.....well done!
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Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/15/2014 9:03:00 AM
THANK YOU Lily... nice to see you hugs

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