Michael J. Falotico Poet Rhyme

Disappeared

A teardrop fell on a rose petal...
From sadness that wouldn't settle...
It rolled off and slid down the stem...
Taking with it another tear on them...
I wiped it away from a heart not torn...
Then it dropped and split open on a thorn...
As all the pain just disappeared...
I swallowed the taste and met my fears...

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Dinda Minardi November 11, 2011 at 7:00 AM Awww... Love this, Michael.. Love this.A.LOT!!! How its sadness can relate to my past feeling... :(

M.I.A . November 8, 2011 at 8:22 PM that last line... i wonder.. a beautiful writing of something that has no ending...

Wilma Neels November 6, 2011 at 9:43 AM Mail returned :)

Wilma Neels November 6, 2011 at 8:28 AM I love this Michael, your end line brings it full circle.. It's nice and warm here in Cape Town, even with it being almost 6pm!! quick soupmail coming your way ;) love Wilma

Linda-Marie Sweetheart November 6, 2011 at 5:13 AM amazing analogy Michael luv and a very intense piece full of deep emotion.. the rose ..the thorn..the tears.. the fears.. all compile into a victorious life now... bravo on expressing feelings in words luv.. a treasured write.. your J.G. in thoughtful mode..pondering..xoxo..

Sarah Seraphin November 5, 2011 at 7:09 AM * “Whenever I Think of You * My Dear Precious & Sweet Michael * I Vision A Delicate, Fragrant & Loving Flower, Yet * I Know There's Sooo Much * Unto The Beauty of Whom You Are * This Treasure Here * Tis Just Another Reflection of Its Wonderful Truth * Shine Bright * Bright Light * Luv Always * Sarah.”

Andrea Dietrich November 4, 2011 at 9:26 PM michael. did you mean split in line 6? This is very nice. It's good to see you back again posting. Thanks so much for my placement in your contest. Luv, Andrea

Elizabeth Wesley November 4, 2011 at 4:48 PM I guess a good cry can wash the problem away eventually. Love the end and resolution of the pain Michael. Thank you for your comment, I think we all go through it which gives a reason to write. :)

Kirby Magee-Dittberner November 4, 2011 at 4:44 PM It's a well done poem, you say a lot in those 8 lines, and I really feel the sadness. I don't think you could have possibly made a more chilcé first line though...I really don't.  -KMD